![]() |
Im heavenly
I'm ghetto as hell
but beautiful as well it's easy to tell, that i'm Heavenly Wether im dressed down in boots or in a cute pink suit im still real, im still me which is Heavenly I work, I go to school just a tiny bit rude and im sweet, very nice have a good adittude I'm not into all the drama always keepin my cool And by now i know you are feelin me cause its quite clear and obvious that im oh so Heavenly |
Good flow. Too short, though. You contradicted yourself when you said you were rude, then on the next line that you were sweet and very nice. Not too deep. Self glorification is not really my thing. Two lines brock off from the length of the other lines. Decent. Keep writing and elevating.
|
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~
i read this because my actually name is Heavenly... but to respond to this, it was kinda short, well very short u stated a couple of things that were contradicting, but keep doin' what u do and keep elevatin' ya work, ma, stay up and peep my open mic in my sig, aight pz.. *get quality and quantity workin' together..* ~uno~ |
I agree with Fiya
it was real short..no real emotion Lady Fiya=sexy peace B.L.A.! |
I agree with B.L.A.'CK try next time using more emotion and use a different rhyme scheme because this one was too basic... Keep droppin though... |
^ha ha y'all peep my open mic- and i'm from chi-town too, southside near stony island hit up my open mic in my sig.. :)
|
iight be sure to peep mine too....in my sig....
|
All times are GMT -4. The time now is 11:57 AM. |