First Open Mic
 

Don't tell me I suck, This is my first song ever... just give me tips on how to be better
It's not exactly gangsta, even tho thast all I listen to (Like G-Unit)
MetEoR-K---------------------------------------
Let me introduce my self, the name is MetEoR-K
Or call me Merk for short, the one who be ingorin' gays
I could also be considered as the evil and quiet kid
Who thinks fat girls should be told to "go on a diet bitch"
New to this rap game, so I have to spit hot flame
Must make it to fame, Don't wanna be put to shame
Rap is my love, and love is the only thing that I have
My mind is set toward makin' it, and I'll show that I can
Fuck you and your man, if you even think that I can't
I'll show you how hot I am, by exploding you like pop cans
Haters are like green eggs and ham, gettin' eatin' by Sam
I hope I got a point across so you don't get sprayed like Pam

By the way that my life is, with all of this crazy shit
I wonder if I could ever have the heart to make it
I will make it to heaven, the get kicked on out
Then head straight down to hell, on the fastest route
All that I could ask God, is for one big thing to happen
To live my life fully, with the greatest skill in rappin'
This is my second verse, and you probably bored of me
I could have time to reherse, when you are bored as me
Lyrics are the Motivation in Earths planned out life
For the kids who need that extra push, just a little help
It's almost like they are like a toy, stuck up on a little shelf
Who need some attention, and don't like being by them self

EDIT: Added Second Verse

If this was actually good enoguh I would add another verse and put in a hook

this was alrite, get more creative, add some multis, you got a starters flow, but yeah put some work it you'll get somewhere.

Uppin for a little bit more of feedback, also I got a question

What kind of topics are easiest to write about with out... seeming like a gun slinging pill poppin drug dealer, I like that kind of music, but from what I hear, they are just too commericalized and aren't real hip-hop and stuff

I'm a big G-UniT FaN

Added a Second Verse- I'm bad when it comes to topics to write about

pretty good for a first.