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K.ontroverz.Y 10-20-04 09:39 PM

frein-ma$ter vs ..kontroverzey..
 
Battle Rules:

6 - 10
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 10-23-04 at 09:39 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

System 10-20-04 09:40 PM

frein-ma$ter has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-20-04 09:40 PM.

System 10-20-04 09:46 PM

..kontroverzey.. has ACCEPTED this battle on 10-20-04 09:46 PM.

frein-ma$ter 10-20-04 10:20 PM

..kontro beat me last battle cuz i was expectin less from him...so props ! but u aint gettin another win....

yo,

yo,

..You beat me last time but thats 'not what it meant'..this is ur descent..i ll jump over u cuz ur skills are only good once a month like 'Paying Rent'..(KO)

..You think your frein master? I believe ur murked cuz everyone can see your only a 'substitution-of-knock' like 'The-Invention-Of-Doorbells'..(its ova)

..Your talent? I’m choosing-to-mod-it-with-lancers cuz the 'closet you’ll get to hotness is moving-to-tropic-of-cancers..I’ll open your chest and ask for answers, but nope cuz the only time 'Yo Land A/Yolanda twist' is 'Middle-Western-Dancers'..

..I've beat those chumps.. now his facial area has never seen more bumps..ya flipped sideways cuz now i 'got ya feet in the air' like 'reebok pumps'..

uppin for ur verse kontro

K.ontroverz.Y 10-20-04 10:21 PM

Master? your highly over-ratin' your abil-ities Kid Spits Garbage, Yet tries to keep his city-clean...
Dawg Im Spittin' Gilliteens, Your Linez are more re-used then Mcdonalds cups In poor facilities...
Punch-lines Pop you in both-eyes, Have your vision blury like it was not easy for you to stay sober...
Like bad cooks imma leave dis kid baked-over, have dis battle advertized more den celebritity make-over's...
Like pissed off wivez I'm di-shen Objects,leave this chicken cooked, Tonight I'm havin' chi-cken selects...
No Vampire, but my lines straight rippen ya neck, Dump your body, have the Wolves Li-cken your flesh...
Winnin' I object like a shitty case, Nines'll Blow your "top" off Like a Windy days..
Gotta double barrel lookin for a double date, have you steppin back like mee-tin gays..
Don't mean jail when i say your times up, like the tower of pizza your lifes hangin side-ways...
Spittin Flamez on your ass, have you runnin coverin your ass like in jail showers standin beside gays

K.ontroverz.Y 10-20-04 10:22 PM

Master? your highly over-ratin' your abil-ities Kid Spits Garbage, Yet tries to keep his city-clean...
Dawg Im Spittin' Gilliteens, Your Linez are more re-used then Mcdonalds cups In poor facilities...
Punch-lines Pop you in both-eyes, Have your vision blury like it was not easy for you to stay sober...
Like bad cooks imma leave dis kid baked-over, have dis battle advertized more den celebritity make-over's...
Like pissed off wivez I'm di-shen Objects,leave this chicken cooked, Tonight I'm havin' chi-cken selects...
No Vampire, but my lines straight rippen ya neck, Dump your body, have the Wolves Li-cken your flesh...
Winnin' I object like a shitty case, Nines'll Blow your "top" off Like a Windy days..
Gotta double barrel lookin for a double date, have you steppin back like mee-tin gays..
Don't mean jail when i say your times up, like the tower of pizza your lifes hangin side-ways...
Spittin Flamez on your ass, have you runnin coverin your ass like in jail showers standin beside gays

frein-ma$ter 10-20-04 10:24 PM

k uppin now!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Triple_N 10-20-04 11:17 PM

Voted For: ..kontroverzey..

weak battle

frein...first thing I noticed is your focus on multies...they semmed forced a it took away from your verses strength big time...focus more on personals an punches anwordplay an you'll win more cuz your concepts were decent but you didn't develop them good enuff to make them hit....flow was good structure was solid just work n what I said an you'll be fine.


Kontro....your punches were somewhat stronger but not by much, your setups were lagging on some lines, but flow was cool an strucutre was alot better than what I've seen....complexity was fair...your verse was jus a lil harder hitting so I gave it to you.


Punches: kontro
Personals: kontro
Flow: frein
Structure:tie
Metas: kontro
Vote: kontro

ghetto cripple 10-20-04 11:48 PM

Voted For: ..kontroverzey..

ok, kon fix your font. both of you need to clean you lines up, leave the hit ata the end of the line, so we now where lines end.

kon had more hits and more knowledgable usage of his talent, keep up the work and keep practicing.

fein.... i feel like im tellin alot of ppl this cuz none of ya are good, but doo like i did and take time off to practice your flo learn more about your surroundings and use it, learn how yo rhyme things that dont seem to rhyme dont be a easy rhymeer like " chumps and bumps" try things like " power" with "endowed with" flo with it and you will get wat im saying.

kon get this one

K.ontroverz.Y 10-21-04 06:33 AM

im not good imma vet on this site...dawg ur 1-4...LOL...

frein-ma$ter 10-21-04 06:54 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by ghetto cripple
Voted For: ..kontroverzey..

ok, kon fix your font. both of you need to clean you lines up, leave the hit ata the end of the line, so we now where lines end.

kon had more hits and more knowledgable usage of his talent, keep up the work and keep practicing.

fein.... i feel like im tellin alot of ppl this cuz none of ya are good, but doo like i did and take time off to practice your flo learn more about your surroundings and use it, learn how yo rhyme things that dont seem to rhyme dont be a easy rhymeer like " chumps and bumps" try things like " power" with "endowed with" flo with it and you will get wat im saying.

kon get this one


loll sry but i dont take advice from newbs....uppin

K.ontroverz.Y 10-21-04 08:18 AM

uppin............................................. ........

K.ontroverz.Y 10-21-04 11:24 AM

uppin ill drop a vote on ur battle....................

Godz Angel 10-21-04 03:32 PM

Voted For: ..kontroverzey..

I think Kontraversy has this..... by a little bit......

He had some nice wordplay ... but you could use mreo than that ... but still it was alright....... i guess....

ou had nice flow and kinda good structure but your lines were a lil streched... you were crazy with those punches.... i liked em .. you did pretty good with that...

Overall you did very well... i like your verse...

Frein..... you were very good your self.....

Your stcructure wasnt all that good..... but you had som nice punches.... i liked yourf low and your style..... you had some pretty good wordplay .....but Kontraversy has this one... but you did good...NO HATE!

V/ ..kontroverzey..

Return tha fava!

JackOfAllTradez 10-21-04 04:34 PM

Voted For: ..kontroverzey..

Emcee:...Kontroverzey...

Verse:
Master? your highly over-ratin' your abil-ities Kid Spits Garbage, Yet tries to keep his city-clean...
Dawg Im Spittin' Gilliteens, Your Linez are more re-used then Mcdonalds cups In poor facilities...
Punch-lines Pop you in both-eyes, Have your vision blury like it was not easy for you to stay sober...
Like bad cooks imma leave dis kid baked-over, have dis battle advertized more den celebritity make-over's...
Like pissed off wivez I'm di-shen Objects,leave this chicken cooked, Tonight I'm havin' chi-cken selects...
No Vampire, but my lines straight rippen ya neck, Dump your body, have the Wolves Li-cken your flesh...
Winnin' I object like a shitty case, Nines'll Blow your "top" off Like a Windy days..
Gotta double barrel lookin for a double date, have you steppin back like mee-tin gays..
Don't mean jail when i say your times up, like the tower of pizza your lifes hangin side-ways...
Spittin Flamez on your ass, have you runnin coverin your ass like in jail showers standin beside gays

Comments:ok i think you took this by having more consistant and harder hitting punches...a few metas here and there and nice structure.

Marks:
Wordplay - 6/10
Metas - 7/10
Vocabulary - 6/10
Structure - 7/10
Punches - 8/10
Opener - 7/10
Closer – 7/10
Personals – 6/10
Enjoyment – 6/10
Creativity - 5/10
Overall - 65/100
--------65%

Emcee:Frein-Ma$ter

Verse:
..You beat me last time but thats 'not what it meant'..this is ur descent..i ll jump over u cuz ur skills are only good once a month like 'Paying Rent'..(KO)

..You think your frein master? I believe ur murked cuz everyone can see your only a 'substitution-of-knock' like 'The-Invention-Of-Doorbells'..(its ova)

..Your talent? I’m choosing-to-mod-it-with-lancers cuz the 'closet you’ll get to hotness is moving-to-tropic-of-cancers..I’ll open your chest and ask for answers, but nope cuz the only time 'Yo Land A/Yolanda twist' is 'Middle-Western-Dancers'..

..I've beat those chumps.. now his facial area has never seen more bumps..ya flipped sideways cuz now i 'got ya feet in the air' like 'reebok pumps'..

Comments:ok i think tht you lost this becuse of your structure and it took a while to read...not good.. when your listening to music you dont wanna rewind it and find out what someone said...

Marks:
Wordplay - 7/10
Metas - 5/10
Vocabulary - 6/10
Structure - 4/10
Punches - 5/10
Opener - 6/10
Closer – 6/10
Personals – 5/10
Enjoyment – 4/10
Creativity - 6/10
Overall - 54/100
-----------54%

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