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Valor 10-21-04 12:01 AM

critic vs deadly habit
 
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Topic: Alone in the Dark

Critic 10-21-04 04:22 PM

Check,,.. Good Luck man.

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For$akeN 10-23-04 03:59 AM

check sorry for the little late check in................................
oh and yes deadly habit is my alias:)

Critic 10-23-04 01:37 PM

Sup man lets get this shit going,...

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For$akeN 10-24-04 03:48 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by CriTiC
Sup man lets get this shit going,...

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yep....i'll be done tonight........

For$akeN 10-24-04 06:12 PM

The Death

Sitting at the dinner table with all my family and closest relatives
smiliing happily my mother asked me for the potatoes I pass it being cooperative
"Thank You" she replies I say "Your Welcome" being on my best behaviour
she taught me to be a good person and respect god our only saviour
the woman had to raise me on her own I'm a only child and I felt her pain
I love her so much and even when I'm mad at her I wouldn't complain
I look at the woman who gave me birth but she had a look of devastion
asked her what's wrong, but she's speechless clutching her heart in aggravation
I could tell she was having a heat attack so I quickly rushed to her side
to me she spoke her last words, we eyed, she said "I'll watch over you" then she died.

the funeral

September Nineteen, my mother Alicia was pronounced dead I shed tears
Because I know to her I was placed in her life higher than chandeliers
I set out to look my best wearing a suit I thought I've outgrown
pushing myself to her grave, memories flashing back, when I look at her tombstone
She was pretty young day she passed 39 years old lived life to the fullest
17 when she had me, she was suprised I wasn't a current request
but she kept me...it's only been a day since the incident but I miss hearing her voice
I remember her telling me to always make the right choice
well I left the cemetery, saying to my mother my final goodbye
went home and slept my lives demise tears swelling up and I cried

In my room

sitting on my bed while watching trees rustling on my windows
birds chirping a animal was "watching me" I think it was a crow
I looked away and finally made my way to falling asleep
no one with me, no girl, no family, no mother I felt cheap
anyways the dream was blurry and I saw someone who looked like me
ancestor I believe? He spoke he said "get over the death" but I wouldn't agree
he walked up to me like he was about to assault me I didn't know
but he said "I understand go back to reality" but what he said what right though
it got blank but I memorized what he said right on the mark
I woke up...and just now I realized..."I was alone in the dark"

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good luck and oh ya...the crow was the mother if you wanted to know because
the last words she said to him was "I'll watch over you" nah mean?


Valor 10-25-04 03:17 AM

deadly habit wins due to noshow


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