dont care wat u think on this one.
 

they said da' sun would shine so bright in my sky
da tit's blindin' my eyes
to da grime in these guys
they lied
they didnt recognize the powers of wise minds
and never imagined the depths of the power in mine
hopin' i'd fall victim to the demons inside
since i was 'bout eight or nine
Gods been sendin' me signs
on how to tacticly manuever b'hine
enemy lines
gave me blue prints of their mental d'zines
in all men we find
our most prevalent weakness is pride
we scheme,scam,& conive
even when the innocent die
consequence of da' jive
from it,we can't hide
can we escape our destiny
of brimestone and fire
and successfully rest in piece
through my troubles this piece was inspired
meant to express the relation of pain
to the only emcee that i really admire
hopin' it'll lessen her stress when rains
feel my loves,hates,and desires
straight from heart it remains
never give up on the struggles
don't ever be discouraged by lames
and ma' we're all born to die
dat's somthin' thats never gon' change
*****every time you're down remember the first four letters of my name.
in every thing there's something good and something bad.search the good in every bad that comes your way and never forget that you already know the answers to all your questions you just have to search your soul and dig em out.

dat was a good piece...didnt realize u were dis good..damn boi!! but newayz i mean u can work on da flow a lil bit but otha than dat..good 1...10/10

Yeah def , foer a newb you got potential.....

I mean work on the strucutre a lil biut and maybe up ya vocab and user words with more imagry but other than that
tight drop

8-10

keep dropping and go peep out the poetry forum , mad dope shit in there

good lookin out for the advice Ice.Lil C i got much luv for u baby stay up.

YO, tht was gd very fluent . u remind me of kanye west

very well said just work on the structure a bit so your lines want be to short
8-10

thx 4 da feed back.

I felt this it was decent.. 6/10.
You got some potential just need to elevate.. Peace.

yo dat shit was pretty dope man...
i was definately feelin da flow and wordplay...
only thing is like my man said.. longer lines and u be str8...
u still get dat 10/10 tho

good looks on da feedbak.thx.keep em comin'.