After All That...
 

another one of those hate you/love you kinda love songs...feel this...

..relax-and-listen, tell me why you're actin-different..
..my back-is-bendin', and I'm about to crack-from-tension..
..we're past-this-friendship, why you gotta play-with-my-mind..
..ungrateful-and-I'm, about to turn my back-and-end-this..
..but before this crap-gets-twisted, there's one thing-you-should-know..
..That you treated me like NOTHING, and still I'd treat-you-like-gold..
..You were the queen-of-my-throne, and I didn't wanna let-you-leave..
..but you did more than put me through hell, you put hell-through-me..
..everynight I fell-to-knees, asking why you weren't respectin'-me..
..wishin-you'd'stop, so-my-heart could finally rest-in-peace..
..tell-the-devil-to-quit-testin-me, and just let-me-be..
..but I know if I hurt you, baby my body wouldn't let-me-breathe..
..my eyes won't let-me-see, this pen wouldn't let-me-speak..
..now I finally realize, just how much you meant-to-me..
..my-everything, I know that we were meant-to-be..
..lets end-this-grief, no more beef, just friends-to-keep..

All was good, till about half way through, and then this line just killed

but you did more than put me through hell, you put hell-through-me..

I really liked it man, everything was in place. Decent shit keep it up.

Hmmm ...

You dont need all the Periods all over the place, it makes people not wanna read yo shit. Just keep it simple and leave all the designs out.

I was feeling the rhyme sceme ... some parts seemed a little forced just to get it to rhyme perfectly like you was.

Other than that,decent message ... ok piece

thanx for the honesty yall...I really appreciate it...uppin for more feed...

lol it was good but then it got killed doing that blah-blah-blah-blah-blah stuff to long.....

id rate dis shit 7/10

yeah it was good. good multies. woulda like to see it extended a little longer but it was good............

thanx yall...thinkin bout writing 2 more verses and making it a song...I'll be sure to take out all the periods and not over do it with the 'blah-blah' kinda shit...again thanx for the feed yall...uppin

uppin this shit...QUIT SLEEPIN YALL!!!!!!! shit...

uppin for more feed...

it was a good piece.little tiring towards the end but a good piece.finish the song.i'll be waitin' to read it.stay up.

Aight Dis Was An Good Piece Here Nice Multi'z Good Flow

Nice Rhyme Scheme But Either Way Dis An Good Piece Keep It Up Aight

Put An Feedback In My Open Mic

The Death Night P.2

Plz I'll Preciate Tha Feedback

Da Link Its In Da Sig Mayne

thanx yall...this feed is really appreciated...keep it comin...will return the favor...uppin...1

It was tight mayne, and it seemed like everything was in the right spot, but i gotta agree wit everybody else that that 'blah-blah' stuff did get tiring.