Monolo Flow Improved-Feedback Aprecciated
 

yo, ivé been werkin on my shit,haha wud ya'll think?


-Yo my ices gleam, type mean, sell to fiends
Shoot guns, parallel
Pistal bust well
Kid whatever, desert storm like bad weather
Clique together, keep gats under the leather
You lightweight, what? I'm heavyweight hold weight
Yo it's jail niggas comin' home taking a shit
Yo illegal business, them niggas got dealt wit
Got smoked
God body cat, he sniff coke
Yo he's old time, thinkin 'bout drinkin' his wine
Regulatin' 9-9, get my crew out, survive shootout
Tactics, keep gats under the mattress
Player hater - ur team upon the regulator
Set you up, you wont make it to the elevator
You never been to jail, I'm jail seen
Niggas seen, me in jail since thirteen
Shooting up scenes
Real niggas take cream-


4 all ya'll haterz- wud u think?

Okay Monolo Okay Im Tony Montana Okay naw lol
yo it was cool mayn nive flow saw some mulit's in there pretty good structure but gangsta Rap aint that impressive on tha net but it was cool big ups kidd

good looks fam, much appreciated.

hot shit.. the begining reminds me of scarface lol.. but yea yo props

improve your flow man and Bomber-Z lets battle. talk shit but lets do it in a arena.

improve wud?.....i thought it was flawless, pleez be mo specific fam

alright it was very good but i think you got way more talent cuz you could battle me with some votes. just improve a little more.

no doubt, good looks fam, i appreciate it.

yeah man. that mother fucker bomber wont battle me. when it comes to battling he ducks like a mother fucker.

werd, i got skillz but my text battles been fallin off lately, but i gurantee i win my next battle, i repeat GURANTEE- :thumbup: 4 real though.

any more feedback on my sick flow ya'll?

i need 2 kno how i can elevate a lil, help me out sun-duns.

ayo this cripple here, that was hot, you be mad flowin' lets see that skill there put in some of ya battles, i wanna see what you bring to ya next battle,
"Shoot guns, parallel
Pistal bust well"
that line was tight for real, i get a pic of two chest tubes hand in hand just spittin' lead, i like that alot.

"You never been to jail, I'm jail seen
Niggas seen, me in jail since thirteen"
sick flow and a very nice word play with the whole thing, you be rhymin "jail" and "*een" all at the same time, now thats how you rhyme same words "jail", i aint like your battle with rhymin "me" but this worked out very good.

"Player hater - ur team upon the regulator
Set you up, you wont make it to the elevator"
again this sets up really good imagery, im picturein this shit, and you put it together great so that the last line gives you the whole picture. first we understand there are some haters and that theres beef there and then "regulator" someone goin to die then with the elevator line, most would have said something about killin on the streets but you came with an elevator line, nice, reminds me of a line by fabulous he says, real short but is awsome it goes "i ride up on em' like escalators".
i like this also "Clique together, keep gats under the leather" another image line,
overall very good, kind of suprised how your battle verse was after readin this,
dont be lettin up on no one, go for the kill, grab those motherfuckers by the throat and rip they esophogus, wind pipes and tongue all out at the same damn time then spite salt on they wounds. lol. good luck with everything, and if you get enough posts vote on my battles, if they not closed, also check out my open mics, links on my signature.again good luck.

this was koo, i kinda liked it keep it up and jus work on da flow more, gj

GOOD LOOKS, thas the kinda feedback i need, holla