Punch Lines To Some Cats
 

Punch Lines To Some Cats

You run around as a dumb washed up clown making harsh
Corrupt sounds, why march up and down town getting squash
By pounds of nouns from my verbal attack son, you the largest slut
Best harvest nuts you a squirrel in my world my bling cut
Like King Tut, like tasty religion make hasty decisions
You a pasty pigeon no wings don’t fly high and see visions
Locate vicinity go hate the enemy throw a grenade on toe
Like a low grade parade you hoe made like prostitutes oh no!
Try sprint like flo-jo but a no-go in rap, spit loco crap as a bozo
Just a haughty misfit G and your shorty should git wit me I’ll show
Her a good time, hood wine is Boones farm, soon alarm her candy
Taste and panty lace, girl’s fanny erase my sexual thought dandy
Look you shook and disable got your book on the table
Pages don’t turn I rages learn grammar just to stable
And turn glamour my way, proceed wet with beads of sweat
On my forehead you hardcore misled like flunkies in school regret
Monkeys don’t rule you got jungle fever I’m humble like a beaver
Like mike I be with Spike lee on sneaker commercials, got a retriever
To guard my yard retards like you not allowed on grass your style
Don’t last long not fast and strong the trash is all senile

I don't really think that was a poem, but besides that it was okay. I did not like how you would continue the lines to the next line. Vocab is okay. Flow was pretty good. Overall, it was fairly good, but in the wrong sub-forum.

Thanks For The Props And Critiques For Real Doe

This belongs in the open mic thread.....but it was good, it had great flow and vocab, but it wasnt a poem, maybe read some others in this forum to get an idea......1 :thumbup:

Thanks For The Props On This One For Real