please give feed. It WILL be returned.
 

20 meter high sky rise building's tumbling down..
nothing but kaos, screaming and a rumbling sound..
vision's of desicion's causing conflict and havok..
no worrie's about being a convict ..you see it you grab it..
if people try hold you back..grab a knife's and stab it..
car's colliding,bar's residing into illusion's of saftey..
people now relising all the mental pollution they gave me..
on my hand's and knee's ,not praying but begging god to save me..
head's turning to see bed's burning and saftey destroyed..
I think up a plan and gracly deploy ..a flare to the sky..
I see many poeple dieng ..i stand aware but cant do a thing..why?..
cause this is the end as we no it..
god is over our stupidity..now it's his time to show it..
the sky's raining concrete.. my body feel's weak..
one hit to the head..my sight's gone bleak....

(hook)
the end is somthing enevitable.
in 10 year's every invention..we gone be regreting it all.
so dont be afraid...just be expecting it yall....


awake outta my coma to see the first site of what's left over..
Thing's dont look right..am I on x?,,,no im sober..
i relise im seeing str8..im seeing f8..
I think of fleeing..untill a voice say's."wait"..
I turn to see the description of the person's face..
I trip.. shit im hurt. i raise my hand up into the dusty sky..
the voice speak's and say's grab my hand trust me..
".why?".
cause im here to take you to were you are spose to be..
The voice get's clearer ..I here it close to me..
the dust clear's..I feel trust ...no fear's..
all of a sudden i have seen my fate..
I seen the greatest sight nowen to man..
I relise the hand is god's showen me the grand pearly
gate...

this is a diffrent style to my usual. So If any 1 has any comment's(good or bad). Fell free to tell me. I want to elevate with this sorta style. So feed is needed and WILL be returned.
pz

this was aight man nice drop, ive been trying to see ho you spit but you say this is a different way but yeah 8/10

thnx for the feed oreo.
ill check the link in your sig.
pz

shit my open mics are all in the top ogf the forum

ummm ok.lol..
upping for more feed.

check my sig for more, you got any other open mics?

yeah i gotta collab with "i mind"
plus some old dead one's.lol.

think you can send a link of it?

@ this was a koo piece, liked the 1st verse more then the 2nd, hook was aight, closer couldve been written better but still a nice drop, props man, it was a good read nice flow....

thnx for the feed
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can you please leave feed. At least tell me what you didnt like about it.I need to elevate so the only way i can is by getting constructive critism.
pz

why sleep??????

nbo one leaves feed no more, but ill up this

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