Sumthin' I just came up wit.....Critique
 

I ain't scared of anything I ain't afraid,
except for the thought of bein' enslaved
who's saved? Not me I'm not worried ya see,
it's not the physical, it's the mental
enslavement that's essential,
in takin' over a particular cultures temple.
Remember that fact - not the false non-fiction way they act
are they on your side?
Yes! Well thats what you think,
when you wasn't lookin', in a blink,
I seen 'em sink, syonide in your drink.
I wink, you catch on, at least you better
you be deader then Freddy Mercury in a leather
sweater, you betchya, infectchya wit the
H.I.V. nectar, cuz thats what they do
take out the non-aggressor.
They make machines of hatred for violence,
use science an alliance of technology
and primitive giants.
Defiance is how I stand
they tryin' to cut off the hand of man,
so we can't help ourself, I'm in stealth - mode
I told ya before, what do I need to use morris code?
I broke the mold, a cold breeze rolled over my soul,
let go, like I did, look inside kid, don't hide it,
try and find it, don't deny it,
it's the way it is, you'll never know
if you keep your eyes close,
it just goes to show, slow minds think alike
thats why they got control.

Thanx fellaz for the advice I can see now what I need to do to elevate....................LOL

like i said on the other peice just up the flow and volcab and this stuff won't be slept on as much

I appreciate it my man but alotta catz sleep on some tight ass shit in here na mean. Thanx again ( but I can flow this ish none stop) cake like


peace