Zoned out spit..........
 

Obviously you never battled me in a tourney/ cuz you'd still be in a gourney/ takin' a journey to tha hospital , unstoppable is my fury/ hurry-up and think of somethin qwik to spit/ before I split- yo neck open and inject it/ wit hydrocloric acid/ feed ya to tha aligator in "LAKE PLACID"/ or wrap ya up and stuff ya in a casket/ mummify yo remains
explain to yo family you askedforit/ Naw fuk yo family let'em believe whatever/ severe all tha heads put 'em on a pike, like "Vlad tha Impaler"/ take a picture fo yo family portrait/ hang it on my wall in my bedroom so I can jerk off to it/ wait a minute did I forget somethin'?/ dat thumpin' under my bed, naaaw its nothin', ya dead!


Just sumthin' off the tip

not as good as yours I'd guess but Ima tryin' ...........LOL

a little simple again if you want peeps on your shit you gotta check out other people's shit more

TIGHT SIMPLICITY IS NEEDED ON SERTAIN SUBJECTS THIS WAS STRAIGHT

Yeh it was simple man, ya know your elevation is in process so keep spitting and elevating... You jus need to think of a decent subject matter and spit your thoughts, think problems in the world, a days experience, whatever you feel comfortable with and release on the page... More multies and internal rhymes needed here, play around with your style and develop one unique, text is different from mic, as everyone can see your broad outlines, so show em your skill... Work on your vocab, you can spit more words then that, and checc your syllables while using vocab... Incorporate some wordplay and metaphors and deliver what you wanna spit, you got potential man, jus keep dropping ish, you will shine one day...

Peez...

Yo I just wanna say thanks Catz for givin me some feed back "simple sells records" ya know, I realize it has been a month but I'm always busy peace out.