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Denied Truth

11-01-04 02:43 PM

Da Bluez

2nd Poem

The Blues Are Back

And Longing For

A Soothing Sound Or

A Flamboyant Roar

A Confused Soul

That's Seeking Truth

Shall Find Solace

In Their Own Blues

fluidmoon

11-01-04 05:35 PM

your vocab is great, try to make your poems contain more,and put some time into em,i think they would be a lot better, nice job...1, oh and 3 poems on a page is the limit, because a lot of people like to get their work up as well.........but i appreciate your talent..1

Grammar Popo

11-02-04 01:47 PM

Good vocab. Too short. Rhyming would be nice as well, but it is not necessary. Just put more time into it.

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