~Siccness~
 

..I'm sick-with-syllables, Black Magik, a twisted-criminal..
..Alwayz 'brewin up trouble' like, witch-rituals..
..A demented-individual, I come nasty-with-words..
..rhyme-with-a-vengence, each of my-sentences, are blastin-you-herbs..
..leave you crashin-and-burnt, who wanna get down-with-a-demon?..
..Everytime I flow, you choke, like you had a mouth-full-of-semen..
..Its hell-when-I-speak, I'm evil, like satan dwellin-beneath..
..I kill-these-kids, by filling-them, with more 'shells-than-the-beach'..
..to hell-with-emcees, they aint worthy to touch the ground-that-I-walk..
..with each-word, I'm leaving each-herb, in streets surrounded-by-chalk..
..kneel down-when-I-talk, matter fact, kiss-the-ring..
..Leave you fags-ate, call this the 'Shaq-trade', the way I 'split-ya team'..
..split-ya-spleen, I rock-shows when I come with hot-flows..
man, Im the 'deepest thing to hit the streets since pot-holes'..
..Im nasty-with-mics, leaving rappers gasping-for-life..
..Its Magik, leaving more 'scratches', than 'faggots-in-fights'..
..you get strangled-quick, who the hell let hell's angel-in?..
..made-to-win, face-it-bitch, I'm dangerous..
..insane-with-spits, best-free's, who the hell wanna test-me?..
..who wanna rumble-with-thunder? I'll 'wear-you-out' like 'guess-jeans'..
..I dont-play, it's no-game when I throw-flames..
..Dawg I don't-lie, I got more 'dope-lines' than 'cocaine'..

yo can I get some feed?.......I will return the favor...leave me some...1

yo this shit is tight, i love the punchlines, only about 1 or 2 lines seemed stretched. overall i give it 9/10, also could work on the ending. Should think bout entering a punchline contest. keep it up.

thanx dawg...lookin forward to readin some of your shit...1

ill...god damn!!!...

leave some reel feed you bastard...

uppin this bitch

That was fucking :cussing: awesome!!! 9.5/10 :shoot:

tight drop.good structure, hot puches, nice wordplay.keep em comin'.

thanx yall...uppin...1

uppin for more feedback on this bitch...quit sleepin yall...damn

That was tight dun. Punchlines, struture, flow, everything. I'd give you a 9/10. Lookin' forward to readin' some more of your pieces.