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BlackMagik 11-02-04 04:28 PM

I Miss You
 
..I was blinded-from-stress, didnt care for love, just for rhyming-the-best..
..and Imma-confess, that without you girl, my life-is-a-mess..
..Im tired of striving-for-less, I need you back-in-my-life..
..Cuz every second you're gone, its like you stabbed-my-back-with-a-knife..
..Left alone on the blackest-of-nites, but now I'm missin-your-touch..
..Missin your kiss-and-your-hug, shit I'm missin-your-love..
..I miss-the-days, when we didnt have shit-to-say..
..But I knew all the answers to my problems, were a kiss-away..
..now shit-has-changed, I reach out my hand, and you dont-wanna-touch-me..
..been there-for-you, cared-for-you, and still you dont-wanna-love-me..
..dont-even-want-me, I look in ya eyes, but all I see's-my-reflection..
..I cant take the pain, and cant handle the feel-of-rejection..
..I miss-ya-laugh, miss me and you, skippin-class..
..and whenever, shit got weathered, you promised me that it-would-last..
..The queen-of-my-heart, beautiful, like autumn leaves-in-the-park..
..more than my light, you were my eyes to see-in-the-dark..


yeah...leave some honest feed on this...I might add a hook and another verse if I get around to it...but 4 reel tell me how you liked this...thanx yall...1

EastCoast 11-02-04 04:36 PM

that was nice....liked the way it flowed...only a few lines seemed to short....i would have to give this one a 9/10....should think about making a song using this verse

BlackMagik 11-02-04 04:41 PM

coo...thanx homie...uppin...

LIL'DREW 11-02-04 08:31 PM

nice shit...9.5/10...this is some of the best emotional shit ive ever seen...
keep bringin dat fire...

BlackMagik 11-03-04 08:05 PM

yo!!! can I please get some muh fuckin feedback on this piece?? Shit is deep...lookin to see what yall think...QUIT SLEEPIN YALL!!! I waill return the fuckin favor!!!

JJFLOWSUM_5 11-04-04 10:12 PM

yo MAGIK dat was hott man i give u 9/10 man dat was nice man

BlackMagik 11-04-04 10:16 PM

no doubt derrty...whut part of tha lou you from homeboy? holla at me man...

JJFLOWSUM_5 11-04-04 10:21 PM

yea man me and yo boy eastcoast
b at same school dawg he told me u was hott
and damn he was straight

JJFLOWSUM_5 11-04-04 10:23 PM

but ey MAGIK u gotta chek my sh!t out
man and tlel me wat u think

Rebellious 11-04-04 10:53 PM

The piece was hot man. Nice multies,the flow was great, loved the way u expressed yourself. This piece could have been longer due to the fact it was emotional, should've thrown a lil mo' imagery. Tight style,up! :thumbup:

BlackMagik 11-05-04 03:49 PM

good lookin out yall...appreciate the feedback on this...uppin...1

Loveliss Grandz 11-05-04 04:26 PM

you did ya thing here mann...........10/10
keep em comin'

BlackMagik 11-05-04 05:51 PM

thanx...uppin this bitch...1


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