I Miss You
..I was blinded-from-stress, didnt care for love, just for rhyming-the-best..
..and Imma-confess, that without you girl, my life-is-a-mess.. ..Im tired of striving-for-less, I need you back-in-my-life.. ..Cuz every second you're gone, its like you stabbed-my-back-with-a-knife.. ..Left alone on the blackest-of-nites, but now I'm missin-your-touch.. ..Missin your kiss-and-your-hug, shit I'm missin-your-love.. ..I miss-the-days, when we didnt have shit-to-say.. ..But I knew all the answers to my problems, were a kiss-away.. ..now shit-has-changed, I reach out my hand, and you dont-wanna-touch-me.. ..been there-for-you, cared-for-you, and still you dont-wanna-love-me.. ..dont-even-want-me, I look in ya eyes, but all I see's-my-reflection.. ..I cant take the pain, and cant handle the feel-of-rejection.. ..I miss-ya-laugh, miss me and you, skippin-class.. ..and whenever, shit got weathered, you promised me that it-would-last.. ..The queen-of-my-heart, beautiful, like autumn leaves-in-the-park.. ..more than my light, you were my eyes to see-in-the-dark.. yeah...leave some honest feed on this...I might add a hook and another verse if I get around to it...but 4 reel tell me how you liked this...thanx yall...1 |
that was nice....liked the way it flowed...only a few lines seemed to short....i would have to give this one a 9/10....should think about making a song using this verse
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coo...thanx homie...uppin...
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nice shit...9.5/10...this is some of the best emotional shit ive ever seen...
keep bringin dat fire... |
yo!!! can I please get some muh fuckin feedback on this piece?? Shit is deep...lookin to see what yall think...QUIT SLEEPIN YALL!!! I waill return the fuckin favor!!!
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yo MAGIK dat was hott man i give u 9/10 man dat was nice man
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no doubt derrty...whut part of tha lou you from homeboy? holla at me man...
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yea man me and yo boy eastcoast
b at same school dawg he told me u was hott and damn he was straight |
but ey MAGIK u gotta chek my sh!t out
man and tlel me wat u think |
The piece was hot man. Nice multies,the flow was great, loved the way u expressed yourself. This piece could have been longer due to the fact it was emotional, should've thrown a lil mo' imagery. Tight style,up! :thumbup:
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good lookin out yall...appreciate the feedback on this...uppin...1
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you did ya thing here mann...........10/10
keep em comin' |
thanx...uppin this bitch...1
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