i write(unfinished)
 

first time doin these let me know whut ya think---

I write these lyrics 2 release whuts on my mind/ one line at a time, voicin my heart threw a rhyme/
express my emotions my feelins, whutever lurks inside/all tha pain & fears my soul trys 2 hide/
And i ride my trials out with tha swift stroke of my pen/ All my victorys along with all of my sin/
And time again this paper is attacked by my ink/ as i sink 2 where only my heart can think/
on tha brink of destruction yet so close to hope/ its hard to cope on tha last thread of this rope........
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any..........1??? A- either every1 is so blown away by my skill and cant pull them selves 2gether to post a reply or B- it sucked so bad no one wants to waste there time saying how horrible it was

i leaning 2wards tha latter one ............

feedback any1???????????

yo...i liked it alot...8/10.....i would definitely like to see da finished version....you gon be real good, real soon.....just elevate a little and youll be great.

hey man thanks, didnt think i'd get any feedback. but thanks 4 da words.

no prob mayne................!!!!!!!$$$$$$$$$$$?????//

good shit...like East said id like to c it finished maybe it would b much betta...not dat da unfinished wasnt good cause it was...newayz good piece all out...8/10

thanks man, yeah probaly finish it soon. was in one of those moods and startin to write it, jus hard to get in tha...state of mind when i was writtin. but thanks for tha lines

i read ur piece before but didn't have time to drop no feed.my apologies for dat.
you got skillz and no it didn't suck.9/10.feelin the structure and it flowed real good.keep em' comin' and don't get discouraged by no feedbak.stay up.

........thanks bro........