how i do
 

i dont care wat people say cause im confident,
and i dont care wat they think,cause to me it's a compliment,
im tired of people rappin when they flow is symplistic,
tryin to act tight when they low as LIMP BIZKIT,
they mad cause i got four "15's" in da bac of da trunk ,
hatin cause every where i go u can feel da bump,
they juss no it's so nice,and now they gotta have dis,
eye's so blinded they dont think bout da savage,
every where i go they do wat i want,and the gurls promise me,
they all treat me wit respect like a prophecy,
u no all my gurl they all real nice and none of them is grody,
but u should see da sh!t dat da gurls show me,
cause u no im on da stage as i spit dis verse,
u doin kinda good but ya skill is worse,

dis is ya boy JJ straight from stl..lol..dats how i do

need elevation bad stucture keep it up tho..

ey y'all give me some feed bac
dat was my first post tell me wat y'all think bout it

hmm...it was decent for a first-ever-rap on this site...but dawg we from STL...YOU GOTTA REP IT BETTA THAN THAT DAWG!!! Come on homie!! Keep it up dawg...you'll get there soon homeboy...holla...1

yo man i no i got betta i was juss spittin for my first one
but thanx for da advice homie.holla

The piece wasn't all that elevated but it was decent. Could've come a lot more creative, used multies to crisp the flow, and used a bit more vocab. Peace stay movin!

great new comer shit but bad as a pro shit

Wasnt that bad... I guess...... Good Verse tho...

Peace out~

ya vocab needs to elevate i give u a 4/10 fix ya structure too