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Ice Pick 11-05-04 06:23 PM

The Break Up
 
My girl actually broke up wit me this week… I guess if the topic is words before you die… Ima die… PeeP…


Love… All I wanted to do… was surround you… simply…cover you…
comfort you… cherish you… keep you near… forever…

My heart… torn… raped… and discarded…
My soul… tired… as if I am no longer willing to go on…
My mind… confused… as if I do not except what has just happened…

:: The unexpected has come to past ::

Our love… is nothing more than a faint memory…

What was once in my hands… has crumbled…
I try to hold on… struggling to gripping tighter… but… the remaining ashes… seep through my hands… slowly…

:: What… has forced you to no longer love me, care for me… like I did for you… ::

I pray I am not at fault…
I shall do anything to make us work… prosper… last… forever…

:: I mourn ::
I tell myself to move on… my feet… heavy… I have not the strength… to move…

I ask why… :: silence… ::

:: The signs… where clear… ::
Miscommunication… Led to no communication…
Hugless goodbye’s… Emotionless I love yous…
You no longer look me in the face…………

My world revolves around you……
Abandoned… Stranded… alone… coldness takes over… illumination is gone… darkness…

I need you… your gone…
I breath you… my air… gone…
You feed my soul… your gone…


I breath no more… touch no more… I feel no more… I hunger… I thrust…

iamthatdude87 11-06-04 06:10 AM

nice poem i feel ya dogg...stay up dogg.......

Ill-Grammatix 11-08-04 03:03 AM

damn dawg!!!! poetry, too?!!! this was some really good shyt... especially with that free-verse style ya used in this drop. real emotional... deep... made a brother wunna snatch his shorty up and wisk her off to da poconos for da weekend just because...lol... for real tho, i liked this shyt a lot...9.5/10

~Lady Fiya~ 11-16-04 01:51 AM

Ice Pick, that poem was touchin'..
Love… All I wanted to do… was surround you… simply…cover you…
comfort you… cherish you… keep you near… forever…

My heart… torn… raped… and discarded…
My soul… tired… as if I am no longer willing to go on…
My mind… confused… as if I do not except what has just happened…

:: The unexpected has come to past ::

Our love… is nothing more than a faint memory…

What was once in my hands… has crumbled…
I try to hold on… struggling to gripping tighter… but… the remaining ashes… seep through my hands… slowly…

:: What… has forced you to no longer love me, care for me… like I did for you… ::
^nice all nice... keep droppin' that nice stuff, Ice Pick..

fluidmoon 11-16-04 02:10 AM

You know, i've read all of your drops Ice Pick, but i must say, this was the most raw, full of emotions, and just dripping with every type of feeling, your words set the tone well here, and i liked the way you set this up, kind of like your love was rain drops, and they were falling away....thats how you wrote this...well, what i took from it...but so intense man, i always enjoy reading your pieces,and in time,your broken heart will mend........1

I. Mind 11-22-04 11:04 PM

damn u ice pick, im jealous lol, you always seem to do better then me in poems, but wow man, i honestly call you the best poet in this site, better then poet n valor put together... 9.8/10

~Luciano~ 11-24-04 11:36 AM

nice poem kid
im feelin u on this subject


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