Lyrical assasins/Jesus walk with me
 

Lyrical assassains lets do this epic!! Dear lord, we are gathered here today to show our love through our rhymes, here me out

epic tell them wats good!!
Jesus Walks WIth Me In Tha Shadow Of Death
Lord Help Me Cuzz Feels Like Im Out Of Breath
EveryNight I Get On My Kneese And Pray
That I'll Make It ANother Day Its Typical
I Need Tha Bible Even THough Im Not Biblical
Only Jesus Cane Save What Im Going THrew
And Make It Better For Me And YOU!!
Spasnatic Dudes On THa Block Dont Got
What I Got I Got Jesus In My Life And
Right Now I Need To See Tha Light And
WHen THa Nights Dark I Lay On My Pillow
WIth Tha Window Open Looking At Tha SKy
Hoping Jesus See's Me In His Eye
Show Me Tha Light As I Need
Cuzz In THa Mist Of EveryThing
It All Seems Like A Dream

jesus walk with me..............
god show me the way, they caint take my crown,
every day i pray, we talk but make no sound,
praise your name in church and threw my songs,
relaese my sins, just right my wrongs

cookies can love god too!!!
Dear lord as i put my two hands togther,
i can feel your reign through any weather,
i was alon on the streets you were by my side,
you eased my pain i gained when my child died,
the corners to the churches,anywhere he fits,
i need jesus to walk with me like Kanye's hit,
devil gots me strapped like the seatbelts in Kanye's whip,
held my hand after the bad deal went down,
helped me run after the guns and tire screaching sound,
when you took jai'airs life i didnt speak no more,
then i got shot, doc's i couldnt walk no more,
so after that i dint beleive no more,
got locked up with a life sentence that night i layed,
got down by the bedside, i looked uped and prayed,
woke up and they let me out the next day,
that night in church i looked and felt you presence,
when i read your life story, how could you repent us?
took your life for mine, so for that i quit my life of crime,
i turn to your name in a life of rhyme, gotta let you shine,
now i admit i hate those who dont believe us,
so i live for you, in the name of jesus,
my wounds of all sins, death of all men,
in your name,.....................amen

jesus walk with me..............
god show me the way, they caint take my crown,
every day i pray, we talk but make no sound,
praise your name in church and threw my songs,
relaese my sins, just right my wrongs

and lord that how the assasins rep your name so forgive us o all our faullts and bless our names AMEN

I Want SOe FeedBack

maybe the first god drop yet???

meh good stuff bad stucture to be honest yall know what i mean...

peace..

fix ya structure up ya vocab...currently a aiight peice....

I enjoy reading pieces expired by Jesus(God). The line up above was my favorite because it shows we learn from others past, and not to make the same mistake. Great piece showing we all need some type of faith in our lives.

On the down side I just felt that the piece was a bite off "Jesus Walks" by kanye.....the chorus had to much of the same feeling.....maybe that what you were shooting for though.....

I feel if this piece had a different chorus I would of took it more original....
But keep up the work....Good job.....

yea work on ur vocab and structure but both of ur stuff came from the heart especially oreos so i liked it

it was ment to be like kanyes walk with me but yeah

I know....I said it was a good piece....

thanks yall upppin for more feed though

uppin get at it................

only the same damn people get at these open mics shit is gay

ur verses were very nice, it reminded me of Kanye West's version not bad.. you had an aight structure a few misspellings but nice overall..

my favorite parts happened to be:
took your life for mine, so for that i quit my life of crime,
i turn to your name in a life of rhyme, gotta let you shine,
now i admit i hate those who dont believe us,
so i live for you, in the name of jesus,
^that was nice, the way it was worded was great.. contents is what matterz in the end and i felt you made your point come across while sticking to the topic well..
good job, get at me sumtime u two
pz..

good drop.was feelin second verse more.vocab needs uppn and the structure had a few minor mishaps.other than that good work.keep em comin'.