Step Up!!!
 

Who Want What?!?spew acid on all like i drop poison on a map/
bone fractures and spinals craps i cause to those who yap/
been from the bottom to top, top to bottom and back,skillz so sick,i'll str8 murk ya rap/
its a fact, drill holes in ya head till ya brain collapse/
and bury it in a tomb so you unable to relapse/
ya stylles been fucked, makin abrupt holts to those who corrupt/
mad manners, causin disturbance like a crime scene just opened up/
brass hammers, green lanterns, nigga u stuck/
Men-Iz in dis bitch, so anybody step-up/


first drop on this site...not tryna start beef

feedback peoples!!!!!!

good vocab bad wordplaying n shit not bad for a newb but not the best...3/10 keep elevating

you're got miles to walk 'patience is a virtue
if you made it to the top i'd be impressed I'll give that a 6/10 i've been giving lots of dudes high scores. I'm sure your next drop will be much better Just concentrate on something and relax have a sense of humour with it. :shoot:

thanks for da honest commments....more feedback

This was a decent piece.

Wordplay was good, your vocab was good, few good metas.

The only down side was some of your verses did not make to good of sense but overall this was decent........change the view.....dont just flaunt your self

for ur first drop this was aight.7/10.