this ish looks dope.... lemme hit it up for tha first
 

here we represent the levitated state, over horizons of the blazing fate, beaming across like a likwit percept to erect reflects in it's slow steady steps to a next degree
then free as the flow of a soul release
i'm shoutin PEACE to all the peeps with conditions at roundtable positions like suicidal missions
ripping apart at the shrapenal beats and uplifting seats
from all the emcees b-boys to G's and the refugees who rappin in sprees...
gonna getch'a shakin ya knees... like it's a low down hoodie party boogie,
just bounce ya ground at an ounce of sound
wit the round wonder question in rhettorical answer
like ya mom when she heard that her birthmark wuz cancer
my critical points droppin clockwork joints and breakbeating the tables while defeating the lables by unraveling angles
of a combine to rhyme that sever the mind on a splice to righteous for advice of the mightiest
to conquer ya fears before the worst appears and finish the business, work the fitness
the slack acrobat bust guns and strap the gats
but all the true cats be bustin off caps of physical lyrical raps
to everthing like anything it's all phatt cuz i got the dick of a dawg
bass for breakfast, the meal of the god
lowride the glide like we slide on wax
performin storms of lyric attacks to a mileage of tracks
no plastic bytes for these fantastic sights
fight for rights in despite an eclipse to the enlight of intellectual height
I'm ranging outer dimentions that blazin tentions to phayzinventions
while the explode of flow kickback the bass where there lye and behold
temptation where may minds be feast
at the feisty beats to a masterpiece
mixing wit technique within the heat off the blaze of this nation ripp'n mello ebrations across radio stations
it's pop devastation like self humiliation
aimin at'cha from tha long range liva snypa...

you used the same kinda words to rhyme to much try and up the volcab just a little it was a nice peice just a little simple but we all have problems so don't take it the wrong way

what up with cockcheez^

ya love dirty dicks? u need a role model boy

dont kno what the others were readin but this is tight. aight its a bit difficult to read (you need to space it up a bit and highlight rhymin words) but honest cuz i liked this. vocab was nice flow was definitely there keep it up and check mine returning to home peace

word dawg, thx for the input....

^^uppin4***

im uppin this for ya wyze this is gettin slept on and its too tight for that

peice together tightly, you probaly would need to seperate your barz so we can get the rhymin words, but them shitz hot,dirty...1

Word Up, maad respect y'all, pz to all those who peep n' dont sleep

uppin.... ayo check it out y'all sleepy hedz