True Freestyle, need Critique
 

Im spittin 16 in 1.

I spit, to make the mic like a flammable torch
"It's understandable" my mind is a mechanical force
And I'm a cannibal my mandible is chewin' ya corpse
"I'm tyrannical, a vandle of intangible sorts
Not a mineral a mammal or an animal, I'm.
Metaphysical, the syllables in critical rhymes
Flows blowin' off ya limbs like invisible mines
Been invincible with rhymes since the biblical times
A warlord with a sword from the Mongul Horde
Speak the tongue of the lord, to bless my vocal chords
They tried to resurrect hip-hop, but faith is gone
So I'll take it over by force like Ghengis Khan
If you say it ain't raw, you better pray to Allah
Cuz I got an arrow that'll travel straight thru the jaw
Got breath control, flow like a ship with a sail
Divine when I spit, like if I sipped from the grail
Cuz I'm immortal

If this is genuinely off the top of ya head then this is nice, nice vocab nice flow sorta reminded me of kool keith. check mine returning to my home. aight cuz 1

Fo sho thanks dawg. I twas spittin and my dawg Kaffiya typed it as a freestyle herre.

I Like When Cats Bite Whole Verses..

Makes My Job All That More Easier..

I Admit It A Dope As Fucc Verse, But It Sounds Much Doper Coming Out Of Tha Mouth Of Apathy..

HA..

Re: True Freestyle, need Critique
 

your a dirt bag biting whole verses nice job biting apathy dowg