an importand letter
 

We been friends for a long time, but I don’t think dat nigga around u make u happy I think u should be with me, we have da same personality heres my verse to express it


Yo listen

It’s just that every time I look at you, I feel like …….I’m dreaming
Girl ya beauty it’s like 200k diamond its shaped and its gleaming
when you walk pass me, its da fragrance that gets my heart beating
I think da only way to get close to you is by seeing u in my dreams
I know u got an man but I don’t think he can do better than me
Just put ya hands around me, and feel tha luv I got for u …babe
Ya man uses that blue pill vaigra but me I come wit……..natural
With my heart and yo fine ass me and you our luv is unbreakable
Our luv can be so tight couldn’t even be cutt by an sharp scissor
Iam sayin not da facts but da truth, u and me we belong together
I know you surprise what iam writing but da feelings its ……….true
We been friends for a long time but now I think its time for me and u
U was my down ass ghetto chick, never take an slap from a bitch
U was with me when I got shot down, from dat hard headed ..crip
Everyday u was feeding me ur home made famous ………….soup
But I knew when u started freestylin u’d belonged in my …….krew
Our lives can be so brighter, I see within tha future I see da ….light
Now I’ll leave dis in yo hands me or him choose tha right person iight

werd homie that shit was hot... a master peice... hahah good job boi.... keep em comin....

dang man was pretty good.....def got the mesage across coulda used some better vocab tho but i mean not everything requires vocab but i just think it woulda made the point more direct and put more emotion in it...good topic even tho its been done before...i liked this.......keep it up man
peace~1

aiiiiiiiiiight thanks for da feedback plz more feedbacks

InvisibleSkill23 [1:26 PM]: *sniff sniff* :'( That was.... *sniff* a- a- a Materpiece....*sniff*
FlAvA ThUg PiMp [1:26 PM]: lol
InvisibleSkill23 [1:26 PM]: u gon show that letter to her? U BETTER
InvisibleSkill23 [1:26 PM]: lol
FlAvA ThUg PiMp [1:26 PM]: yea i am
FlAvA ThUg PiMp [1:26 PM]: she like my world
InvisibleSkill23 [1:26 PM]: good
InvisibleSkill23 [1:27 PM]: u gon make her cry... hahah

Unrealghost yea word son

Pretty Good-You had Nice wordplay and nice Vocab...Line's were perfect length and werent strecthed keep doin your thang :)

o aiiiiiight how ind a hell u become an guest and no an member huh? dats kinda fucked up

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One Of The Best Open Mics I've Ever Read Here.10/10.stay Up.

dats what iam talking about.....................word thanks for da feedback~!

werd more feedbacks uppin mayne uppin for more feed

nice emotion.....it reminds me of the songs I used to make like "About A Girl"
well you used a nice vocab pattern woot woot! it was deep to:) pretty good
I say about a.....................8.5/10

goddamn my fast reading:thumbup:

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good drop drastic.......i dont usually bother reading the whole thing when its a verse about love n shit but this was aiight. 7/10. keep it up mate.

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