Asian Gyalz Life
 

Yo……….. in dis life we only hav one opportunity
Be who we gotta be ,
Say wot we gotta say,
Do wat we gotta do
When da door opens, u miss it den its gone
Aint no cumin back
Diz reaches out ta all ma gyals

Yo.. yo ,

Gyalz getting raped and draped across da floor
In dis life ,no one cares anymore more
How many gyals gonna lose dere respect
Go back home, den get da reject
In a gyals life dis has mor effect
Dey suffer more cruelty dan da crime suspect
Arranged marriages flee da whole world
Gyalz getting married ta
who dey dnt know
Who dey neva seen
Coz dere parents too keen
But neva ,look through her eyez
She Suffered all da changes, no one realized
Dey use her as a passport
To were dey wanna be
Dnt care for her future or her destiny
Shes treated as a slave in her own home
She has no space ta be free an rome
She has ta iron clean, wash an cook
Its time ta open our eyes, an take a deeper look
yeah


Girls and ladeys livin today
Don’t let the men treat you this way
We all have equal rights and a say
So don’t let your life long suffering pay
All my ladies take a stand
Group together like one hand
We don’t have to suffer Anymore
So stand up and show what ya’ll made for


While she at home, her husbands out
Getting mor gyals, dats wat hez about
She dnt hav a say coz shez a gyal
She can only sit down an watch da world
Shez all alone havin kids on her own
Da husband dnt care, dnt even call her on da phone
Loadz of kids an no money ta feed
Husband only dere wen he wants ta breed
But dnt see da need , when his kids are starved
Its jus one gyal two gyal three gyal four
Leave the one wife then look for sum more
All ma gyals dnt take the strain
Dnt let yo men cause u any pain
Drop yor burdens an start ta restrain
Coz the opportunitys wont cum again.
Yeah…uh…………yo!!


Girls and ladeys livin today
Don’t let the men treat you this way
We all have equal rights and a say
So don’t let your life long suffering pay
All my ladies take a stand
Group together like one hand
We don’t have to suffer Anymore
So stand up and show what ya’ll made for

C’mon……………………………………⠀¦â€¦â€¦â€¦

I know its hard wen ur men aint there
They come home late and say don’t ask were
They smell of shannel / k cline everyware
But you know another gyal has been there

He covers with lies when he had affair
Cups and plates flying everywhere
Children hiding, you can see the fear
Coz this relashionship will end near


Now all we want is a change
One voice to rearrange
The way ladies live in this life
From becoming a teen to being a wife
So now we leave you loud and clear
all my ladies don’t you fear
because equality will always be near

deep...
Your rhyme scheme is simple. you just use endliner's.
Try using bigger word's. That way it is easier to create a multi out of it.
Instead of .
were,there,here,care....<<<those are simple rhyme's.

overall ok drop.
4/10
keep dropping and elevating.
pz

up tha vocab and use some more complexity.......overall topic is good and this is pretty deep piece

its aight...........stay up

Flow was hard to follow an i didnt like ya structure....

But the deepness an the story was so well put it out that any of that didnt matter...

I'm giving you a award...."Largest Verse ever read by Jay SmileZ" award...cause u had me reading from beginning to end...nice drop ma

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