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THis is my new song right here...i'mma be recording it soon....










Chorus
Blowing up justa get respect
Blowing up to Get intellect
Blowing up without tha nines or tecs
THATS SUM CRAZY CRAZY SHIT




said yo man ya'll betta check this
And on the mic i'm highly respected
I'm blowin up now so i'm highly protected
Since i'm rising to the top ur all neglecting
The fact that i'm blowin up and gettin big
Got better in 3 months...damn thats quick
Growin up now i got myself a click
Blowin past ya'll like Michael Vick
Blowin past ya'll like i just shifted to 5th
Hows a mc's intellegence sposed ta grow
And how a flows justa a flow
And how a hoes justa a hoe
And how i be hustlin and gettin that dough
Fuck man i guess thats just the way it goes


Chorus-Blowing up justa get respect
Blowing up to Get intellect
Blowing up without tha nines or tecs
THATS SUM CRAZY CRAZY SHIT



Shiften from 1rst to 5th
In a matter of seconds
ya'll lives will be coming to an ending
And you know i'm not prentending
Now that i got money to be spending
And i got the money to be lending
I guess i'll be like a fuckin money tree now
but i guess thats how lifes sposed to be now
Leavin my family tickets to be in the crowd
My real dream was to just make my Family Proud
Cuz it seems like most the time i just lettum down
But just to see that frown get turned upside down
That'd take the tears outta my eyes for once
Just to know that my life long goal is done

Bit Too Basic......But it's alright...Improve your Wordplay a bit..That is all..

hmmmmmmmmmmmm

this was ight...you couldve worked on your wordplay and your multis more



had good structure...but that isnt enuff....nice try tho

5/10

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Infector return some feedback...

not too good...way too simple...try coming a lil more complex and lenghthining your bars next time...also, work on that chorus...1

i wasnt really feelin this one...the structure was messed up...and it was a little basic...but i see hella potential...keep at it and u'll get it fo sho...~1~