for am i done?
 

looking into the mirrior
your supposed to see 3-d
its hard to look in the mirrior always
when everyone is everything id rather be

most people see a person
clear, respected, sharp
their skin is blemishless unlike mine
because mines full of wounds from words that harp

the words that literally
cut past my soul, past my skin
its because of these words
that my wrists are what i push the knife in

because the words tell me im unreal
non-exsistant, just a portrayl
of a person, for a real persons like is ripe
and mine just seems to be stale

i see a 2-d image
dull, set in black and white
because my own thoughts
have killed the colors in my internal fight

with reality and fakeness
for i can see that im fading away
ill just finish my life, kill my soul now
so in the future it and i wont rot and decay

wow sarah all i can say wow.......i liked this one cuz i can relate... more then ur other newer ones.... but alot of ppl cant really except them selves umm like me... but anyway this had a good flow
because mines full of wounds from words that harp
harp or harm?... blah well anyway its late im upset.... and i read ur poem i liked it alot... diggin thiz much...respect~peace~ me

since you first came here monkey....you really have elevated to a much higher leve...this was full of pure emotions...executed so well...and the imagery was so good....heavy piece...respect...

leah- thanks for the reply.... yea, i like this peice tooo... and i see alot of peeps that go thru the same thing so i wrote bout it.. its supposed to be harp... as in people harping on u... lol... thanks, love to ya

varentao: back when u were darneck, *hehe* u were one of teh first peeps to reply to my stuff, even though i look back on it now and go, "wow, i sucked" and i thank u for always taken ur time to read my work, and im glad u apreciate it, cuz i always love ur critique on my poems... love to ya

well I know I aint been here in a while...and I come back to hotness..very deep piece...no need for a quote I liked the whole thing

2nd2none: its nice to see ya back.... ne way, thanks for the reply, i really aprreciate it CUZ EVERYONE IS SLEEPING!!!!! lol, thanks again , love to ya

very meaningful and deep;

because the words tell me im unreal
non-exsistant, just a portrayl
of a person, for a real persons like is ripe
and mine just seems to be stale

was feeling that.

danja: thanks for the reply, even though when i typed it, i accidentally put "like" in the 3rd line for "life" lol... thanks... love to ya

wow, this was dope!
Much props ...
Elevatin to a higher level fo` sure!

Pz xXx DiMe
respect ~1~

monkey? damn this poem was real n(y)ce, darneck was right youve really been gettin better and better in your pieces, fav linez below

most people see a person
clear, respected, sharp
their skin is blemishless unlike mine
because mines full of wounds from words that harp ---monkeypoet

captured attension easily understand cuz of the way you put it, much respect on this poem monkey...pz

[*¤ÐîMêØñФ* ] : thanks for the reply... im glad u liked it... your replys mean alot to me... love to ya

Poetic Blais: thanks for the reply... thats what i strive for, to capture the attention easily... im glad u enjoyed...love to ya

yo dis piece wass poppin/ keep writing fam. i hope to see more of ur shyt. uno

WHOA, that was hectic in imagery. didnt give me that good of a picture, but i wish postive thoughts. this was a really good peice in imagery and wordplay.ya got the content out really good and my fav lines were the 1 verse: when everyone is something i'd rather be. <<<----- thats a hot line!!! either way stay up and live postive. peace

joey

synicle:thanks for the reply... undoubtedly will u see more of 'my shit'.... lol.. love to ya

joey: thanks for the reply... that line *connected to teh line right before it* is one of my faves in this peice too.... im glad u liked the peice so much... love to ya