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you still cant rhyme... ur HORRIBLE

you don't have to rhyme all da time you dumass.

When im spittin Ive got all da mc's havein fits shittin
rymes dat are bringin death upon you wid every words hittin
/\ Wordplay but nothing breathtaking

I'm takin these rap clowns for a lesson of bein mentally torchered
If your still gonna resist the battle picture yourself bein slaughtered
/\ wtf wack

I'm givin you affects so you can pick it up in ya mind and collect
you think u can beat me but you all get squashed up like an insects
/\ played punch

lets find a solusion for all the reasons u h8 me come to a conclusion
Bitches when I listen to your music it's like causing me ear pollusion
/\ slight punch nothing special again

So remember bitch I don't wanna here anything you gotta spit
If you think your the shit u need to be cut up wid some whips
/\ cut with whips???..no comment

Basically like i said in all my previous comments on ya open mics...improve on punches and wordplay blah blah u heard it before

u need more practice.ur vocab was good but ur flow was off and some lines were forced.6/10...keep practicin'..