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Loveliss Grandz 11-23-04 01:40 PM

just flowin'..........(sharin' my inner most....)
 
>>i dunno wat i'm feelin' today.this piece i guess is just a reflection of that.it's a bunch of mixed emotions that i could only express like that.what do you think????

Broken spirits n,dreams shattered,thoughts seem scattered with no focus in it
lonely,drunk nights me fightin' my soul like bumbfights yet no ones winnin'
confusion abusin' my mental,causin' sparks between paper n pencil
it's all in my mind yet it's hard to express what i've been thru
and how i continue when downfalls are eventual,rainy days are sequential
beef with every body from peeps on the street to the dude i pay my rent to
some for shit i did,others for things i never meant to
father forgive me this sippin',smokin' shit's got me giddy,
and still i'm crushin' up buds n twistin' up phillies.....................

**takes a hard pull on his blunt**
*then exhales and starts again*

I'm rehearsing Gods scriptures under the influence deliverin' harsh pictures to my state of being like sudden death's a threat to sars victims
drowning my pain in dark liquors,burn in my chest soothin' the strain from my hearts quivers,i've wept rivers like christ to wash sinners,even if i'm ontop it seems in my heart i'm a lost winner,abandoned by the warmth of love so i live thru these forced winters
face bruised from the frost of the wind,cuttin' my skin,soul's scar'd cause R,Grim keeps touchin' my friends

**takes anotha pull on his blunt**
*begins to spit as exhaling smoke*

Sorry to see em' go so young,youth they've never experienced,streets grew em' up quick like life's just an experiment
got you wonderin',"how?", like the egyptians n pyramids,mind over matter cause i'm still here,they wonder how did they build this kid
structured for ruckus,not programmed to know just what love is,
that's why i never miss a chick at night,under the covers
life is a party where the sun never dances with brothers
sisters is trickin',thats why preachers lay hands on the mothers
while i'm out on the street feelin' smuthered,by the heat in this oven
thrown in this melting pot with the rain clouds stuck above it

*chokes on smoke then finishes*

It's so much i feel that words won't explain,it's like i hide from myself like birds from the rain
i've travelled the rocky roads holdin' da toast n it hurts when i aim
but i can't really complain cause Loveliss Grandz was birthed for this game....


hipnoticz 11-23-04 02:28 PM

shits deep nice choose of words flow was nice vocad was tight nice read bloood

Loveliss Grandz 11-23-04 02:55 PM

thx for the feed.i ain't finished yet.

Loveliss Grandz 11-24-04 08:16 AM

now it's finished and i cant change the damn title.....bahhumbug!

hipnoticz 11-24-04 08:24 AM

shits real deep nice flow man damm ahm feelin this shit nice job playa hope to see more of this from you nice read

ayo can you drop a vote on my battle http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=161582

thankx if you can i will return tha fava

Loveliss Grandz 11-24-04 09:43 AM

thx for the feed.i'll chk ur battle in a few.
uppnnn...........
anybody know how i can change the title on this?

Loveliss Grandz 11-24-04 01:06 PM

can i get some feedback on this?

Loveliss Grandz 11-24-04 04:17 PM

feed me
 
uppn for feed..................................

Loveliss Grandz 11-26-04 07:52 AM

uppn.......................
 
feedbak ppl............................................... ............................

PntBlnkDistnce 11-26-04 09:24 AM

sounds ill man nice flows good ryhmes im new on this shyt so hook me up with some feed http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=162066

Loveliss Grandz 11-26-04 09:30 AM

thx for the feed.
uppn............................

Lil C 11-26-04 10:35 AM

of course my man keeps droppin it hott!!!!...im really feelin dis piece...very deep...although not finished its good as fuck...keep it up...10/10

g-ballz 11-26-04 11:10 AM

wow, i actually liked this...nice emotion and it was deep. overall: 8/10

Loveliss Grandz 11-26-04 11:31 AM

thx for the feedbak peeps.
ay' lil c call me later.
uppn.......................................


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