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D-Illar-1 11-23-04 08:41 PM

I Will Not Forget U
 

SITTING OUTSIDE AS I LOOK AT THE SUNSET AND THINKING “OH BABY”


Da thought of u decease as made my heart bleed , left me with agony
I thought u was gonna be here forever , I guess it wasn’t when u grown ur wings
Iam banging my head on the wall cause its confusing why u left this world
God why u took her, and u knew me and her had an future u watched and observed
Seeing u in an coffin its like seeing our future being flowed away down an stream
Me and u was like bonnie & clyde raising up crime ratings make dese niggas scream
U will always be forever in my heart I always have an image of u in my mind
I’ll never say to another girl “you’re the best one I had” u will always have that abind
Now as iam writing this verse or called an poem cause iam expressing. my eyes getting a lil red and shady
Now my eyes getting watery , wat is this iam feeling down my cheek?, yes it is iam crying cause of u baby
Iam feeling an wind blowed behind my back is this an message from u baby telling to me “don’t cry”
I take my hand and wipe my heart of tears and leave u in rest , ‘don’t forget me” “sigh” ……….bye


FEED BITCHES

D-Illar-1 11-23-04 08:47 PM

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streetryda 11-23-04 08:57 PM

this was good lots of emotion coulda used a lil dif wordin and a better vocab but u only a newb yet so its excusable....but overall 7/10 newb rating keep it up fam.peace~1

D-Illar-1 11-23-04 08:59 PM

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Parallel 11-23-04 09:03 PM

pretty good emotion there...a lil strech lines not bad structure coulda been better...7.8/10...not bad for a newb realy a few multis good emotion really thats what standed out...good lucks homie

Kawn Flixx 11-23-04 09:17 PM

your not a newb lol

How you know I'm proverse nigga ?

8/10 for the dopess of it lol

whats really good?you

D-Illar-1 11-23-04 09:41 PM

Nuttttttttttttttin Mayne Just Chillin Homie Just Chillin ,,,,,,,,,,,thanks For Da Feed Keep It Coming Keep It Coming

D-Illar-1 11-24-04 03:30 PM

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