on my mind...
 

Now see all I ever wanted in this life was
Some form of balance from morning to evening
My souls constantly gettin weakened im believin
My times due to swim and drown in the deep end
If not that dressed bummy on a corner smokin and drinkin
By myself never like anyone else couldnt be if I wanted
Straight up it feels like my life is over and done with
I still know though that I gotta do somethin
Id rather be that than nothin at all stay up for good
After a stumble and fall is the plan I never planed to be
Nothin at all except a young grown man thats successful
But ive hindered myself now my life is a mess too
Id wanna roast right now but im free from parafanila
Still feelin like a failure choices in the past years left
Me nothin but held up thoughts go through my mind
Like what the hell...fuck! will I ever spin outta this spell
Facial expressions like satan upon a throne with some
Angels all chained up from angles with their wings
Mangled and flame fucked lookin like im mad
At the world if an image like that was ever so real
But see thats just not me because im more like
Disappointed if anyones in aggrement with what
Im sayin and actually feels it then join in or dont
Ive became accustomed to standing solo

feel it or dont I just felt like flowin for a minute..keyed
notta minute but keyed..peace

Tight, this ish was tight kat, keep it up........Peace

was kind of off at times...but still raw...and good imagery...respect...

'Facial expressions satan upon a throne with some angels
All chained up from angles with their wings mangled
And flame fucked lookin like im mad at the world'

them lines were amazing it was tight!

thanks for my so off point rhyme scheme of what was on my mind at the time and its all still appreciated too

downin..drownin

i like peepin folks rhymes-but at times if u eva wanna get behind the lines of an emcee its nice to peep their spoken word stuff-dis is a prime example of dat-i see ya rhyme scheme---shinin threw---but u were tryin to focus more on ya heart ---- its tight how as an emcee----even when u not tryin to rhyme-in configuration to music ---but---u do it anyway--------nice piece-mad love always-one

thank you for your reply and props I appreciate it
its something to build on as I change up my lifestyle

ill always be able to write no matter what and the more I
go through will only make me stronger but beat the hell
outta me as well..thank you for your reply

feeling the depth of this joint...

keep reppin

uno

^ Fav Lines ^
Diggin ur style,
Would be easier to follow if u put barz in!

Keep doin ur thang,

pz

I'll admit I had to read this aloud ta get tha rhyme scheme but once if found it it flowed decently... I liked tha feelin of tha peice better than the scheme though... the angels/mangled/angle think was tyte though! Look forward ta seein more

thank you

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one last..downing