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---Time---
Yo, I am personified as an old man, I am time I am an ursurpassable, undefeatbale force, I am time Nature cannot beat me, ma strength can overpower thee Ive been here since the beginning, I will be here 2 the end You can run and hide but ill find you at every bend I manifest myself as fate, or similarily as inevitability Many confuse me with reality, or some waste me livin in fallacies My limbs, Ma hands can be seen as arms on a clock Every day with every passin of ma hand, a shot fires from a glock Cos u best believe ive seen it all, some ppl have balled but all have falled No matta who you are, your empire shall fall 2 me I in many ways rule evrything, it all belongs to me Everything revolves around me, I control life I control the seasons, tha comin of tha rains The most beautiful of things wilter and fade Cos they cannot remain or withstand my fatal blade Im seen as a soft, yet merciless shifting of sands As each grain drops, ill drag you wit ma masterful hands Cos look at me time, being immortalised like 2pac in rap lines This shall survive, till the last persons of the earth reads dis rhyme GIMME SUM FEED ON DIS Y'ALL. WROTE DIS IN LAST 25MINS SO NOT SUM MAJOR PIECE BUT I WANT FEEDBACK..GET AT ME :thumbup: |
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Yo This Was A Dope Piece Stuck To The Topic.....Vocabulary Was Decent I Liked It SOme Big Words Kid...Structure Was Decent Too.....Good Piece.....9.5/10
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thanks 4 da feedback man and the props ---- uppin 4 mo feedbak....word. Peace
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This was dope,the words,the flow,how your lines fit together and tied into eachother,the style, and the imagery were great, beautiful piece,seems familiar tho,like i've read it before somewhere tho, hmm,i'ma check on that, but if this is yours,,wow..pc
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Haha dnt b a joka fluidmoon, i aint no punk ass biter get me....I was listenin 2 Mos Def, Black Thought, Common, and Jazzyfattness - hurricane b4 i wrote dis and Mos Defs verse made me write dis cos i liked tha view he took on time, but those lyrics are mine and so is evrytin else---as i sed i aint no punka ass nita-----thanks 4 tha props.........mo fback yo
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lmao^^, i was jokin wit you man, this was good....1
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hey good piece...tellin me i got talent shit u got mad talent...maybe we can hook up n do a poetry collab or somethin..................good use of vocab n nice structure.....9/10
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feelin' this here.it was like a path taken and nomatter what turn you take it ends up at the same place. a good drop.keep em' comin'
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