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For$aken vs Flow Intelligent
...Topic: Karma... ...20 lines max... ...check in due Wednesday... ...Verse due Saturday... ...2 Votes due on Monday... ...Have fun good luck NOTE: Final has been replaced by flow...so by selecting Final in the poll you will select FLow.... |
checking in im taking finals spot since he dropped out
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ok................................................ .....in
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Dear God, I am here to plea for insanity, so I can still be eligible for reincarnation The truth will be told by me, but please no questions this is not an interrogation It all started when I was eighteen, I met a women and I wanted her heart All I ever wanted was her affection, my feelings were clearly off the charts I won her over fairly, We were in love...I look at her with deep laudatory every night at her house...She would allow me to venture into "Private Territory" But one day for this problem we weren't prepared.......she was pregnant this shit isn't happening!?! it wa supposed to be just the two of us that's meant to be with each other...no one growing in her stomach to take away her attention she'll forget about me, focus on the child and my name wouldn't be mentioned I had to kill both of them, before it was too late....I no longer have a soul it's like the devil, devoured my happiness and trapped me in a selfish hole so I went over to her house a quarter past three while her parents were out hmm... I wonder Shall I slice her neck so she dies fast and doesn't shout? Well I grab a knife from the kitchen, change the murder plans and go to her room And I raped her, knowing that she wouldn't live anyways.....she's doomed then I dismantle her body, grab her intestines and wrap it around her throat I was now laughing hysterically, I controlled her destiny like a remote So God, I should "Sue" you ever though your obviously "judge"mental You think I'm sentimental, but....tell me the verdict and make it gentle - - - - - - good luck... |
can we still drop because yours is late and they are due saturday if so ill drop in a little while
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check the "Important Read" thread
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u have 10 hours 30 minutes before its due |
Ok there are a couple definitions of Karma so for some who might not understand this topic heres the definition...
kar·ma ( P ) Pronunciation Key (kärm) n. 1.Hinduism & Buddhism. The total effect of a person's actions and conduct during the successive phases of the person's existence, regarded as determining the person's destiny. 2.Fate; destiny. 3.Informal. A distinctive aura, atmosphere, or feeling: There's bad karma around the house today. I'm choosing the 2nd defintion to write about so people undewrstand it more.. Check it...... Setting : A Hotel Lobby, A Newly Wed Couple Is Checking In To The Hotel The Mans Name Is Thomas The Womans Name Is Cindy Suddenly A Mad Robber Enters The Hotel, Here Is What Happens... Thomas: Hello Good Evening I Have A Reservation For The Boon's Clerk: Oh Im Sorry Sir We Already Gave Up All The Rooms Thomas: I Reserved A Room Yesterday Cant You Try To Fix This Coming To This Hotel Was On My Wife's Wish List We Just Got Married... Theres Gotta Be Something You Can Do I Would Give Us Rooms If I Was In The Same Position As You (The Clerk Discusses The Situation With Thomas When A Robber Walks In With A Gun In His Hand) Robber: Everyone Down Now.. I Have A Gun And I'll Use It Im A Nice Guy So I Really Dont Wanna Do It But If Anyone Makes A Sudden Move... Im Gonna Pull It And I Know You Dont Really Wanna Run From A Bullet I Have Your Fate In My Hands So Be Real Quiet I Dont Want The Cops To Come And Make This A Riot Cindy: Please Sir Dont Hurt Me Or My Husband We Just Got Wed And I Dont Really Wanna Finish My Honeymoon Dead Thats Not My Fate.. And I Really Dont Believe It's Yours Either Because Im A Cop With A Gun And I Dont Wanna Hurt You Neither Now Your Fate Is In My Hands As Well As Mine In Yours So I Suggest, You Take Two Steps Back, And Open The Doors (The Robber Stares Down Cindy, With His Gun Hanging Limp To His Side, Both Raise Their Guns And A Shoot-out Occurs, One Person Is Left Standing) Robber: I'll Make You Rest At Sea... You Could Never Get The Best Of Me So Stay Still While I Get The Money Or Your Fate Will Be My Destiny ... Damn 20 lines i couldnt go too deep into it like i wanted to in only 20 lines max i need 30 max at least |
v/ for$aken.....
well flow-your drop wasnt up to your skill level.....:( your story oculdve been excellent with a new style of narration but you failed to put a stroy/twist or great emotion into it.......Im sorry for the mistake and wish I could start over.....but.... For$aken-I thought the guy killing pregnant woman woul; be kinda played after Eminem made a song on it, "Stan", but the ending was very good...you told it in a calm manner hwich suited the ending morso because the insanity made her death sound normal.... good job both v/ for$aken... |
yea i think forsaken won this i had a whole other verse for this but it was over 30 lines so i couldnt post it so i just threw something together as quick as possible so i didnt get dqed
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^ ya weerd I had nothing to work with...my style is with 50 lines now....:(^
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lol, sorry ppl, i'm extending it to 50 lines next time
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lol thanks i need that many
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just give forsaken the win here its obvious he won and voting isnt that active so just give it to him
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sorry flow, i made a really bad mistake.. join next time ;) lol
Thread CLOSED For$aken Wins |
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