Rotten Piss
 

Ever since i was introdced to rap music i used it
as a theraputic device plus usin dope to keep me high
i tried to keep that way never had single day where i
was sober so there was evidence in my piss to get
my ass sent to another place to lay my head
fuck id rather be dead stead a doin dead labor
rather lay there in my own bed but fuck it cuz
i though i could clear my piss but god must not
have put me on his clearance list
so clearly i just gave the bitch rotten piss

give me any feedback

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=162445
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=162517

my replys

NICE DOING THAT BUT ITS NOT IN THA RULE BOOK....BUT NICE JOB DOING THAT :thumbup:

what u mean bout tha rules?

check this shit out and give me back somefeed back

wasnt really feeling it.....but it was OKAY....i would give it a 5/10....elevate dawg........structure was off and flow was off, and it needed a lil bit more of er'thang...but dont stop,, keep elevating homie...........

^^word Eastcoast, bit harsh but mostly tru, nice drop man id rate it a lil higher tho- 6.5/10 -- waitin 4 yo nxt pice man........chek sum of ma shit- links in sig