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Loveliss Grandz 11-30-04 01:59 PM

How I feel.............to Lil C.
 
(not that good at this poetry thing but I try)
This is to LilC.thank you for being a friend and just for simply being you.I consider you my true friend.

You made love to my mind via matrix wires
while i was searchin' for a line
I read two lines of ur verse and was touched
by an angel of the times
Your a couple states away but still
we're both bound by this bind
The purity of true love,expressed in ur lyrics
about obstacles u've climbed
I felt your pain and sorrow,
which were deeply internalized
I want you to know that this love of mine
can't wait for another time
I must address the depths of my chest
When my phone rings and it's you
I forget all my stress
I guess the words i fear most
are the words that say it best
"I LOVE YOU"
so much as a friend,
some may call it obssessed.

fluidmoon 11-30-04 02:10 PM

yo,you showed a lot of emotion in this poem,and thats what makes it good,you said some sweet things too,that were true to you,and that also makes this a touching poem,you have potential, so keep dropping,honest opinion man....1

Loveliss Grandz 11-30-04 02:23 PM

thx fluidmoon for the feed back and for answering my question i asked you.

Lil C 12-01-04 08:48 AM

awwwwwww omg i felt a tear comin when i was readin dis...dis poem reallllly touched me n i im glad u feel dat way bout me.....ok gotta put myself together now........overall dis was good, luved da emotion, good structure n ect...n once again thanx Love...100/10

Loveliss Grandz 12-01-04 09:17 AM

glad you liked it.i meant everything up there.muah.


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