Life!!! Feed Back Please
 

im tired people fuckin,then they make da decision to have an abortion,
walk round for da rest of their lives wit da feelin of anga and distortion,
they all get guilty and a few years,even when they tellin da truth,
payed a lawyer all ya money to bail u,but aint got no proof,
homeless people on da streets dien wit no food and no roof,
aint got no clothes,no draws,and no socks and no boots,
start as a young child to grow up and to make some decisions,
make da wrong one and they ruin da way dat they livin,
to lazy to get a job so they juss miss what they missin,
caint celabrate christmas,so they caint give wat they givin,
caint walk wit they head held high,so they look at da ground
and they caint walk wit a smile,so they have to walk wit a frown,
they daddy does drugs,and ya mom is at home..but she is juss cryin
you gotta be agressive put ya self in charge,and give u da crown,

ey yall give me some feedback yall come on'

shit was cool BUT the structure was off and needed better choice of words.....lmfao..hahaha....u got dat abortion stuff from health class....heckie naw........o well.....i would give it a 6/10.

ey yall give me some feed back