I'm Back
 

IT FEELS SO GOOD TO BE BACK...BEEN ALONG TIME...SHIT, LET ME WRECK IT


BEEN ALONG TIME SINCE I SPIT A RHYME WITH SUCH LYRICAL EXUBERANCE, VENOM SACKS BOUT TO BUST LIKE A 30 YEAR-OLD VIRGIN’S NUTS SO I’M SUPPOSED TO DO WHAT ?…YEAH, YOU GUESSED IT, SPITTA GONNA WRECK IT, YOU BITCHES THOUGHT I WAS GONE ? DEAD ? IN CYBER EXILE ? IF YA DON’T KNOW ME, CHECK THE PROFILE, YOU BITCHES LIVE FOR LYRICAL RESPECT ON THE INTERNET BUT ALL YOU GET IS IMPERTINENCE FROM ME, YOU AREN’T THAT IMPORTANT, I TOLD YOU FRUIT PIES I WAS COMIN BACK (I WISH HE’D DIE) WISH ?, COME AND KILL ME…NO, SORRY, I’M IMMORTAL LIKE HIGHLANDER, I’LL BE HERE A WHILE SO GET A COUPLE OF SNICKERS (I HATE THAT NIGGA) MY NAMES IN LIGHTS, SHINES LIKE THE SUN, LIKE NELLY NELL I’M “NUMBER ONE”, YOU KIDS WANT A NAME, COME TO ME, I’LL DO YA UNDERTAKER STYLE AND DO YA HEINOUS, SPITTA’S 15 MINUTES DONE TURNED INTO 19 YEARS OF INFAMY LIKE MOBB DEEP, I’M NOT A SERGEANT, BUT I DO SLAUGHTER, SALUTE ME, I’M READY FOR WAR, YOU LAMBS AND SHEEP GOIN FIRST GETTING FUCKED LIKE IT’S BEASTIALITY, BUT THIS HERE’S THE REALITY…I’M BACK

This was a solid piece, good use of wordplay and rhythm seemed quite sharp all the way through... I werent feeling the format, of caps locc, and it seemed like it was shoved on one line and this made it difficult to read... Jus some tips for the future posts... The content had no substance, but it come thicc with the wordplay and some punches, not something that im usually feeling though... Noticed the use of multies and this helped to keep the rhythm together, some internal rhymes woulda made it stronger and more solid... I think ya need to give your flow something to talk about, make the reader think a little, a story line with a twist or something, jus need originality... I liked the odd vocab in this piece it made it stable, your style is nice, you jus gotta push forward with it... Keep spitting and elevating, a decent drop...

Peez...

LIKE SUNSHINE ANDERSON SAID, "I'VE HEARD IT ALL BEFORE" AND I'MA KEEP DOIN THE SAME SHIT, BASICALLY THIS THE FIRST TIME I'VE POSTED IN A FEW MONTHS AND THE STATEMENT'S BEEN MADE....I'M BACK

flow was nice i liked how u put them comments every where i dont feel like qoutin im tired and lazy but keep elevatin still a whole lot of room for improvment

YEAH...OK, WHATEVER (THAT GUY 'S A LOSER)...HA, HA, HA...I'M PLAYIN

peep muh shit man its called im back(bitch) some where in here

were you in prison? but w/e your back...that sucks...

DAMN, HESCH, I DIDN'T KNOW THERE 2 MONTH PRISON TERMS ? (DUMB-ASS)...GLAD TO SEE YOU HATE THAT I'M BACK

AND I'MA PEEP YA SHIT, NICE

in prison for 2 months is possible if you were on trial for a crime such as murder as where you or your family could not manage bail and you were then found not guilty...situation is realistic so go fuck yourself....

Shit was Straight solid peice right here, peep ma shit

UHHH, HUH...HESCH, THE PAST IS THE PAST SO LET IT BE, I'M HERE TO DO MY THING

AND "CyKoShYnE"...THROWED NAME AND I'LL PEEP YA SHIT

UPPIN

fuckin solid ace peace wen is the audio comin out so gud
everythin jus flowed well
check this out man

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=16099

WHAT'S THE DEAL, WOOSH ?...NO AUDIO BUT I WILL CHECK OUT YA DROP

this was a nice drop

keep doin ur thang