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DrasticMeasureZ 12-01-04 09:41 PM

heart-broken
 
Left me heart-broken. u thrown my heart into an thorn bush, left it in piece(s)
Now we cant talk , now I cant hear that sweet voice of melody that u speak
My love for u was solid like an rock, but now it’s melted like hot candy
U watched my heart blood flowed down-stream and let it drowned baby
I swear I did everything right. I treated u right. But I guess love is truly pain
Left my heart with no loyal, no trust, I don’t know if I ever fall love again
Cause you’ve truly have broken an long relationship love chain
Left my heart with hot burnt bruises like it was left in an hot sand
You gave me an stomach virus, this heart-broke giving me twist and turns
the love I have eatin up has came out, look how red it is, moving firmly
I do not wish seeing u and him kissing around me, it’ll make me feel I have no-pride
But go ahead, do it, then I’ll take the open bible, close it, and let the hell in me arise


chea :thumbup:


the love I have eatin up has came out, look how red it is, moving firmly-the blood in the toilet is moving firm slow motionly


But go ahead, do it, then I’ll take the open bible, close it, and let the hell in me arise- god dont want no devils in his home. so close the heavens gate

~Lady Fiya~ 12-01-04 10:05 PM

Cause you’ve truly have broken an long relationship love chain
Left my heart with hot burnt bruises like it was left in an hot sand
You gave me an stomach virus, this heart-broke giving me twist and turns
the love I have eatin up has came out, look how red it is, moving firmly
I do not wish seeing u and him kissing around me, it’ll make me feel I have no-pride
But go ahead, do it, then I’ll take the open bible, close it, and let the hell in me arise
^real poetry right here... dayum, u got skillz and ur metaphors are very nice, ur last two lines i easily saw what you meant and all... u have a nice way of using words, and a nice flow came outta this piece, it was a short piece but the content was heavily extended.. make sure you keep writing..
nice job fam...
~Lady Fiya~
...pz...

DrasticMeasureZ 12-02-04 03:29 PM

Yo Thanks Lady Chea................uppin For Some More Feed'z Holla

Kawn Flixx 12-02-04 11:24 PM

this a true poem fam...
most people confuse one verse song sheets and lyrics
and label thereself a poet without knowin the true meaning
poetry is a good way to get in touch with your feelings
and your ability to display them in words without hearing anything..
keep writing poetry..and I'll go write one now...peace..hey fiya


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