~~Trigger-Nometry~~
 

Sup Sunz...

Try and read into this, its quite complex, but quite good if understood, jus another concept... Drop ya replies, comments and critique... its written to a beat and when I have suitable equipment, you will prolly hear it...

Look What We Done,
Adding Hunger, We Eating Crumbs,
Call to Infinity, End up with One,
“Trigger” from the Physically, “-Nometry” from the None,
That’s How Arithmetic is Added to Fun…
Its jus how it is, how it twists…

Place your bets and tactics,
Decide the Phatic of A Fight with Plastic, Compared to Wax Candles with Matchsticks,
Simple Light, Its difficult to Practice,
One word Sun, this Earth cant hack it,
Peace That’s it, 5 Letters,
“EE AAY”, Topics and Metas of Thinking Acid…
War everyone need to Track this, No Remix or Classic,
Rewind and Stop it,
Place the Fours on the Floor and Upgrade our Knowledge,
Elevate without Blades to Thinking Solid,
The Nouns, Propositions and Tropics,
Fool the Fate and Feel the Pain of it…
India, Pakistan - Stopped it?, USA, Afghanistan felt the Weaponry,
Expanding the Technology past Man,
Clearing Lives, Sewing Hearts across the Land,
Who needs Knives? When Countries are punishing in Grand’s,
When are we to see only Sands?
Emotions running without Belief,
Aircraft on the increase, Watching your soul Sink to your feet,
Thinking never been Stunned to Sin and Look what I achieved,
No ones saying your Stuck on Greed, Always Good Luck,
But Remember, never to Count your Chickens up…

Call to Infinity, End up with One,
“Trigger” from the Physically, “-Nometry” from the None,
That’s How Arithmetic is Adding to Fun…

Welcome me Back, We speaking about the Weak Things,
Like getting Strapped, Vexing with a Bat,
Never be stepping to Cats without clenching the Muscle Fat,
Sending a Knuckle Clap…
What comes Around, goes Around,
How True is that, it Works Double,
Silence is the sound that’s Worth no Trouble,
Broken Pieces with No Picture to Puzzle,
Above All finish a Friend, or Lend to Extend without the Hustle…
Choice number One, Sit belted back Sun with a Canine Muzzle,
enjoying only Breaths, This Criminal has Caused 3 Direct Kills,
2 Threats, and was Armed with Led,
Courts Will decide if he Rests - Its your choice to invest,
Win against this Test or Sin till your very Death…
Choice number Two, Without a Mess, through and through, look to Guidance,
Seek to Enlighten, think Deep, Mature what Eye Sense,
No one pays for Life cause the Knife is Priceless,
See past the Heights, then Understand what I meant…
Everyone’s the target of the World so show Love,
You choose Number One, The same Earth, same Mud,
Wilding for War inside the Club,
Sprays of Shots now you’re seeing Blood, Disturbed,
You’ve Seen and heard your brother Crushed,
Like I said never Count your Chickens up…

Call to Infinity, End up with One,
“Trigger” from the Physically, “-Nometry” from the None,

Learn about the Punch before its Thrown…
Realise your Goal at the End Zone, Let the world Moan, but Moan Back at it…
Life is a weight that is tested in Masses, Learn to live it, Or it may turn Tragic…
Stay for the Smile and Pain, The thought and brain Package…
Be a Witness to the Magic…

Look What We Done,
Adding Hunger, We Eating Crumbs,
Call to Infinity, End up with One,
“Trigger” from the Physically, “-Nometry” from the None,
That’s How Arithmetic is Added to Fun…

Its jus how it is, how it twists…
Its jus how it is, how it twists…

Ahhh, hope ya got that... Keep the comments coming... Sharpen the mental...

Peez...

yo tis piece was off ta hook in my view tis had no flaws and it all went well together in every aspect keep droppin more ill shit and yo go check mine its called steps on a path

very nice. loved the flow and the concept of it.
holla
one

this was very nice sorta reminded me of spearhead (if ya dont kno em check em they tight). vocab and flow just shone in this and sum o dem multis were heavy. nice bit of originality injected wit the topic ere too, sorta shit id normally try and write about. but once again the uk comin through wit the quality where it matters. gotta hook up and do sum collabs sum time mate show em the intelligence of the uk head.

tight shit playa... I definitely liked the concept.. very interesting.. nothin like the bull shit other motherfuckers drop.. I liked the whole stye of the drop.. keep it comin..

one

Appreciated for the replies, comments and love, keep em coming... Im always replying to other peoples ish, so reply to mine... kmfrob, add me on AIM - emceerhetorix, or whoever wanna collab im down... I would mic with you, but my soundcard aint really up to the job... Keep dropping the replies though...

Peez...

this was a cold fuckin spit---the style was off the hook-content--blazin---the way u put multis into your own style-ive neva really seen anyone do that b4--its about time ---- ima look out for more of ya work---nice spit-madlove always-one

this shit was crazy as all hell in its wordplay and the content was sumptin i aint seen in a good while. good stuff here. stay up and active. peace.

joey

I like this drop...A creative concept...Some nice wordplay...And good vocab

Thanks again, someone give me some critique though, im looking to improve, being positive is all good though... Appreciated for the love and comments... Keep em coming, looking for at least 12 replies...

Peez...

DEFINETLY A NOCH AT PERFECTION.....
NO COMPLAINTS AND THE COMPARISON TO SPEAR HEAD THAT WAS CMADE IS VERY ACCURATE YOU ARE VERY SIMILAR.
BUT THERE IS NO WAY YOU ARE A RAPPER USING POET STANZA TO WRITE RHYMES IN YOU BEEN EDUCATED IN THIS BEFORE

alright since ya wanted some critcism. here what im feelin. even though the wordplay for an intenal rhyme scheme was there. ask your self what the reason i post this. dont get me wrong this was dope but why did u post this. what were ya trying to say with it. i realy didnt find a message behind your peice. see with 'weapon of choice' the 1st verse is almost a movie pitch in which the 2nd verse is can be figured out in the 1st 2 barz. it wasnt nothing extorinare with emotion but it said sumptin. just though i tell ya what i thought a on how to elevteyour peices. no bef. lik before stay up an be active.

joey

Hot Spit...
 

this thread is on point kid... you got good wordplay, a good idea behind it, and a good rhyme scheme. some of the words are a little out of sync with the rest, but it's still hott. keep elevatin' kid, i'm uppin' this shit.

LACK OF LOGIC -
BUT THERE IS NO WAY YOU ARE A RAPPER USING POET STANZA TO WRITE RHYMES IN YOU BEEN EDUCATED IN THIS BEFORE

Erm, imma bit confused with that remark... Poetry is more stretched out bars, no sharp rhythm, thats my style I write with and this has been written to a beat, so im not sure what you mean by that... I aint a poet or you would prolly see me in the poetry section, but I can write poetry...

JOeY TeRRIFYING -
what were ya trying to say with it. i realy didnt find a message behind your peice

I think it was quite obvious, theres many lines to suggest what this is about, that was the whole point of me saying, read into this... This is for first verse...

One word Sun, this Earth cant hack it,
Peace That’s it, 5 Letters,
“EE AAY”, Topics and Metas of Thinking Acid…
Afghanistan felt the Weaponry,
Expanding the Technology past Man,
Clearing Lives, Sewing Hearts across the Land,
Who needs Knives? When Countries are punishing in Grand’s

But Remember, never to Count your Chickens up…
^ That line suggests, dont think it wont happen cos it might...

It does need to be read properly... I think that makes it quite obvious... I shouldnt be explaining it, but it is simple, you dont need to be a brain surgeon to see it... You should read into the lines sun... Thanks and Appreciated for the critique though... Keep em coming...

Peez...

nice peace the work that u out in was really shown & flowed well vocab was pretty gud.

can u read this rhyme by me

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=16311