-MaMa- (ReDoNe)
 

Yo- I'm a "NeWbIe"So Go Easy On Me ;) I've already Posted this Once, But I redid it. Hopefully, it'll be a little better than last time :).It would be greatly apperciated if you guys left me some feedback and let me know what you thought about this Peice. -1-

-I'm only 15, and ready to get out, I hate aruging with you mom, all we do is scream and shout-
-I don't understand you, and you don't understand me, It dosn't even seem like we're Family-
-You say some of the most hateful things, that cut right threw my heart, like a sharp daggard, or even a dart-
-You think I don't hurt inside, but I do. You say your "done" with me, you say your "threw"-
-Everything I do makes you mad so I guess it dosn't matter. I wish you would pick my heart off the floor, because it's shattered.-
-All I am is a responsiblity to you, so you say, I can't believe our relationship turned out this way.-
-You wonder why All your sons are gone. They prolly went through the same stuff I'm goin through, But They got tired and said "To Hell with you". -
-We can't have a civil conversation without a fight, and I know I've spent plenty of times out all night.-
-You think I leave because I wanna go "have fun" but you dont even know alot of the time I go to the graveyard and visit your son.-
-And as I'm reading this, I know you don't believe that I go to visit my Dad, but I do, I'm not out just havin' sex like you think I do.-
-Sometimes I just gotta leave, to get away, I know its not right, but its better that way.-
-The only reason you call the cops when I leave is because if something happens to me, you'll get in trouble. I'm not out drinkin, gettin' drunk and seein' double.-
-And you can't even say I do drugs because I've passed all the tests,I'm not at my ultimate low, but I'm not at my best.-
-There's so much about me that you think you know, but mama- you don't. You don't even wanna get to know me, you refuse, you won't.-
-You arn't involved in my life and havn't been for awhile, when was the last time that you saw me smile?-
-You say you don't like most of the people I hang around. You're one to judge off of apperence, get to know people, enjoy the experience.-
-If You would just take the time to really listen to me, and try to understand how I feel, maybe good things would start to reveal.-
-I hear things from people and I don't know what to believe, are you one that would lie to me and deceive? I really don't know, and the actions and words you speak dosnt help it show.-
-You can hit me all you want, it just hurts my feelings even more, You and Daddy call me names like a slut and and whore.-
-Is that suppose to make me happy?You expect me to sit back and not get mad when you say those things,rather you know it or not it does bring pain.-
-You tell me you think I hate you, mama - How can I hate you, I love you. But the love we have is on a different level than it use to be, I love you, but do you love me?-
-As a Mother you should be here for me, no matter what the situation, without any hesitation.-
-I want to lean on you, I want you to be my crying shoulder, but our relationship is slowly ending, or is it over?-
-You say your tears will no longer fall from your eyes for me, I feel like I've been punched in the stomache and can hardly breathe.-
-I just can't concentrate because of my surroundings, I feel like I'm in a pool and slowly, slowly drowning.-
-You might not think I apperciate you, but I do. If it wern't for you raising me when I was little, I dunno what I'd do-
-Things just arnt right, I hate to fight. I guess We've lost site of whats wrong and right-
-Beating me won't help. Waking me in the middle of my sleep while beating me with a broom, I can't understand It. Leaving bruises on me, I can't handle it.-
-I'm a very emotional person and I let my emotions get the best of me, but my emotions arnt happy, can't you see? -
-I know I do things that I shouldn't do, but I get accused for things I don't do, So why not do it, whatever, I'm threw with it.-
-I love you mama, and I always will, i'm just trying to let you know how I really feel.-

*-Ashley-*

It was more like a story but it's not bad.. you need to fix up your structure badly, but the content nice.. the structure make people not wanna read it.. cuz u can't dissect it in bars or portions correctly.. Not bad but fix your structure.. :thumbup: