fresstylen the truth (this is me)
 

They asked for the truth- ill give it to you this instance--
And explain my mind is this confused from being abused as an infant-
A father who couldn’t be a man but could be a fag-
And malest his child after a few beers and a dime bag-
How many a nights- I clenched my pillow so tight-
Id rip the threads- hearing voices in my head-
images playing the concept of me being dead-
screaming daddy stop!!! Till daddy stopped- after his load was dropped-
or he hit enough times my jaw would pop-
then by thirteen thought I was a man understandably-
but instead I was a child already with a family-
high school drop out-
hearing my wife’s mouth- no jobs so I took the drug route-
I was I working to save the ass she gave out on discount-
By 17 id already been incarsirated, a prostitute,
lost my wife and kids, and had another charge over a physical dispute-
joined the navy- maybe uncle sam could save me-
instead he’d aid me- to have the world hate me.
Dec 23 2000 he took my family –permanently- a drunk driving insident hit twice while the car was swaying-
4 kids between 1 and 7-an ex wife 24 found her their way to heaven-
while im here in hell by september 11-
lost my boy my grandparents and my brother Kevin-
you think this is a joke- when there’s lump in my throat- and im extracting these memories not to sing but to qoate? Nope !
this is more of a ulogy- still fighting my fallen brothers memories- see- I am all of chump change enterprises every identity -including M.K.C
these- each are tears for me- and the way I keep them alive-
to pretend they survived- and im the one who died-
so understand if you think im fake personally-its fine but comprehend each song I write is my real personality- cause for me this is reality.

word up dirty, yo shitz is nice,man,for some reason i feel your shitz more than anyone elses,word up,keep it comin you got some skillz dog...1

I liked where you were coming from in this, it was mos def a good concept, and it was thought out and delivered well... I jus think your rhyme scheme is hella choppy, and I aint piccing it up, your syllables are mis matched and aint working, sometimes i jus get lost within your work... The content was decent, multies were used, some internal rhymes which were good to see... Wordplay seemed laccing sometimes, more wordplay coulda made this to an iLL piece, metaphors and similes to describe to the reader, it works well... Vocab was well used, except spelling but thats a complete minor... Im still feeling this piece, cos of its sense of deepness and understanding, to me its real and thats what I like to read... Keep spitting to perfect your flow, cos you got some improvements...

Peez...

that was nice

we all can be cornballs at times

but when it comes down to it

were real and you did a good job
and showin' that trait

something rappers don't choose
to rap about

being real

holla

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