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badgurl3136 12-06-04 06:12 PM

I Put A Rock In My Shoe
 
I put a rock in my shoe, to forget the world's pain
The world split, black and white, it makes me feel ashame
And then there's how much money, fame, and what kinda car
No, it shouldn't be like that, God made you what you are
It's hard to smile in this deep dark world that we live in today
People throwin' childish fits when they don't get their way
I sit down and think soon the whole world will be at war
Because of what we made, the 2 parts that we tore

I put a rock in my shoe to forget the world's pain
You can't be insane without knowin' the meaning of sane
Jus' like you can't hate sum1 without looking beanth the cover
Askin' to many questions like:how can Mary be a virigin but still Jesus's mother

I put a rock in my shoe, to forget the world's pain
colors go together, red and white, a candy cain
I used to think it was so bad because we were so young
But it only gets worse, itz always on the tip of the tongue
People can't see the storm clouds have formed ova the peaceful sea
And all this hate in people's eyes are startin to worry me

I put a rock in my shoe, to forget the world's pain

DrasticMeasureZ 12-06-04 06:25 PM

put a rock in my shoe, to forget the world's pain
The world split, black and white, it makes me feel ashame
And then there's how much money, fame, and what kinda car
No, it shouldn't be like that, God made you what you are
It's hard to smile in this deep dark world that we live in today
People throwin' childish fits when they don't get their way
I sit down and think soon the whole world will be at war
Because of what we made, the 2 parts that we tore
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ SAY WORD AT DIS........NICE EMOTIONS MA WORK ON VOCAB THE WORDS SEEMS TOO BASIC MA........... YOU LET YOUR FEELINGS EXPRESS MAX RIGHT HERE





I put a rock in my shoe to forget the world's pain
You can't be insane without knowin' the meaning of sane
Jus' like you can't hate sum1 without looking beanth the cover
Askin' to many questions like:how can Mary be a virigin but still Jesus's mother
^^^^^^^^^^^^ CHEA NICE MA BUT WORK ON STRUTURE THA FLOW KINDA WAS CHOPPED UP ON DIS PART.....IT WAS SHORT...........BUT QUANITY OF EMOTIONS



I put a rock in my shoe, to forget the world's pain
colors go together, red and white, a candy cain
I used to think it was so bad because we were so young
But it only gets worse, itz always on the tip of the tongue
People can't see the storm clouds have formed ova the peaceful sea
And all this hate in people's eyes are startin to worry me
^^^^^^^^^^^^^ NOT BAD FOR AN CLOSER......





CHEA AIGHT MA WORK ON STRUTURE........AND VOCAB.........SHOW CREATIVITY TOO,,,,,,,,,EMOTIONS ARE GOOD........I FELT IT.......7/10


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