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Status 12-06-04 11:12 PM

our love
 
Our Love

They say that we are too young and love is out of our range
But I say we’ve been together long enough to see the seasons change
Your so beautiful, when I first placed my eyes upon you I could not believe it
How could some one with a beauty as great as yours not be a little conceited?
Remember our love shall only last forever if you and I pray to the holy gates
As that day grows closer, Shea Lauren Mosher, I promise I will help you escape
During your struggle I will help make the next few years worth the wait
Because as long as were in love together we hold each others destined fate
Shea I promise that soon enough they will realize we are soul mates
Everyday I shed tears, weeping on my bed because our love has become so great
Even at this exact moment I take the time out to search for the tissues
Wishing that our love is actually real and our emotions aren’t being misused
It has been three months and my love for you continues to grow
As we construct this magnificent love our eternal flame continues to glow






..........i love you kuttles.....

DrasticMeasureZ 12-06-04 11:17 PM

WOW LOTS OF EMOTIONS HERE.......GOOD FLOW...........WORK ON VOCAB THOUGH BUT DIS SHIT IS GOOD......LOTS OF EMOTIONS.....U REALLY EXPRESSED YOUR FEELINGS HERE FAM 8/10 WORK ON VOCAB USE META'Z AND USE CREATIVITY FAM PEACE


O AND WELCOME BAK


DROP AN FEEDBACK ON MY SHIT

"the sleep & the dream"

PLEASE LEAVE AN FEEDBACK PEACE

Status 12-06-04 11:18 PM

i did not add alot of vocab and metas because my girl does not really like that ....(i think becuase she doesnt understand some of the metas and some of the vocab


thanks tho

DrasticMeasureZ 12-06-04 11:23 PM

Chea Aiiiight..........leave An Feedback Plz In My Poem

"the Sleep & The Dream"


Sorry For Freeposting Just An Reminder

Status 12-07-04 02:14 AM

yeah i did that already......pce

Status 12-08-04 01:15 AM

uuupppinnn for feed back....

Status 12-10-04 03:10 AM

uppin for some feed back...cmon i wrote this for my girl.......


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