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A Hearts Message
thougts hover over the consequences i take
takin me paths unmade but youve made them real create a world of inspiring actions and never fake wondering what runs through your head, how you feel appealing to the heart that never skipps a beat repeat the word over again but i cant get it right we argue, we forgive, but i live to hear you speak wondering how you feelin how your doing this night you conevy your beauty with such an elegant grace trace footsteps back to the days we were at our best wondering if i effected enough to earn that space that place in your heart so you cant be able to forget made up my mind im letting you make the decision i love you to much for it to end on a sudden note evison a path thats clear, cuz i am a man on a mission whether this is the end or a nefound way of hope just want you to know that these words are true this are my feelings so just remember what ive wrote i can only believe the message percieved gets through |
this was pretty good...definite poetry..syllably count was really good...message was clear...it wsn;'t too long..rhymes were consistent....it could be polished up just a bit.....but 8i can't really tell you how...my mind is blank right now..but this is no doubt...a dope poem
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thanks man i wrote this shit tonight for my gf.......cuz we were having problems about shit......but i set it all strait and wrote her this ish..........just cuz im that romantic type :thumbup:
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aiyo dis waz a nice n cute drop not wat i wwaz expectin
but defin sum poem type ish stay postin oh n peep ish |
thanks fam......uppin lets see some more feed :thumbup:
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it wasnt bad but up your vocab , bitch!!!
kid knockout |
this was nice.........good emotion.........keep it up kid.....and^^ not every piece requires vocab......this was more a poem so thats understood
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weak
yea i agree kid knockout that was some weak shit to soft fo my taste, i aint into that emotional stuff, thas like some shit for girls to listen to when they stressin out on they rag
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upppin.....lets see more feed :thumbup:
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