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Acuity 12-08-04 05:09 PM

magic
 
POEM - MAGIC
elemental concutions are a alchemists productions
sparadic punctuations create mythical potions
superstitious concious thoughts, african bush lotions
ma roots, feel tha soil, converse wit tha medcine man
claims his workings are naturalistic, nuttin pretentious or sedistic
constructin drinks from the plants in our environment
fundamental ancient principles, nothin to ur detriment
traditions, shao-lin, current culture under-pinned
historical martial arts, the art of war and craft
sorcerers of times future and past, creatin disappearin blasts
ur powers have transcended to believers
those now refeered to as blasphemous heathens
faith a mental state of mind, switchin off becoming blind
allowin ur fate in da hands of a spirit, its scary cos u cant c~it
dats da foundations of magic, its belief, a fact tragic
cos its not easy to believe in something u cannot c
but like tha druids of scandanavia from norway to bavaria
in circles hands we can hold, ancient stories can be told
claclulations of ur own conclusions, reality or simple illusions
magic is a idea, it cant b sensed, dnt try n listen 2 it with you ears
see it with ur eys, touch it, or smell it wit your nose
its a transient entity of force which nobody knows

DrasticMeasureZ 12-08-04 05:41 PM

Nikka U Blocking My Chance Of Getting Da Poem Of The Month Lol


J/p


Keep On Dropping Props

Acuity 12-08-04 05:55 PM

haha drastic as long as one of da fam gets it...............

DrasticMeasureZ 12-08-04 06:43 PM

True True True..................................

Acuity 12-09-04 05:24 AM

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Acuity 12-09-04 01:00 PM

fbak ppl........................................fav alwayz returned......

~Lady Fiya~ 12-09-04 01:42 PM

nice topic, i haven't seen anyone post anything about magic before.. creative
i was feeling these lines most:
magic is a idea, it cant b sensed, dnt try n listen 2 it with you ears
see it with ur eys, touch it, or smell it wit your nose
its a transient entity of force which nobody knows
^the only thing i would leave as advice is to refrain from using too many "big" words, cuz you wouldn't want people to have to run to their dictionary and look up half the words, plus it can mess with your flow at times.. but besides that, this piece was pretty nice..
Lady Fiya

Acuity 12-09-04 04:23 PM

4sho fiya............gud fbak.........ill cut down ova long vocab.......u aint left a link 4 fbak returned tho.....................uppin!!

DrasticMeasureZ 12-09-04 04:30 PM

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Acuity 12-09-04 09:44 PM

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Acuity 12-10-04 06:59 PM

up...................

Acuity 12-11-04 05:11 AM

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Acuity 12-14-04 11:00 AM

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Crossword 12-14-04 04:46 PM

yeah, poetry gets slept on... Anyways, onto your poem.

Was very nice in the vocabulary and rhyming section. I liked the topic was very original and descriptive with what you had to say. Nice structure and it all went together nicley.

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