"Crusader"
 

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/l...ioncanmusic.htm

"Crusader"

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i like this beat, you got emotion goin good, good voice too, work on ya flow, you would be ill if u got a good flow, i see mad potential in you. you just dont have a rime scheme. lyrics are eeeeehhhhh. progress on your style, its original.

Listening..

Quality is alright.. turn ur vocals down..

Flow falls off at some parts..

Your breath control messes up at a few parts..

Lyrics are pretty good..

Overall, after you work out the kinks in ur style ull be dope..

Keep ur head up.

-Mimesis

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i was pretty impressed by this, sounded good...you need to be more confident with your skills, i liked your style though, very meaningful...keep spittin emotion...good shit

just keep flowing, get it down a little bit more, delivery was decent, you are quickly improving...good shit man...

vocab was a little lacking, but thats alright on emotional tracks...

anyways the only thing you need to sorta change is how you pronounce words...
really pay attention to it, over pronounce things...it just makes it easier for the listeners...

quality was good though

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Your vocals are real echoey, that's a bad thing usually, are you using echo or reverb? If you are usin Cool Edit then using Tight and Close is the best setting, I make my vocals more dry then wet for presence. Your flow is off, you got potential though, you need to read up on rhyme schemes and stuff. Make each bar like 10-15 syllables and ride the snare, think of the beat like this ------*---------* <-----That's one line, the asterisk is a snare, try to hit a rhyme on a each snare, or at least the ending snare, hope it helps, read about inner and outer rhymes to. Decent track, but it could be better, peace!

-Tactics

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The Echoes are a bit annoying, you could use your voice better with the delivery tho but it could just be those echoes, they really do make it alot less likeable. Lyrics was pretty good.

Check mine please. much appreciate

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=165103

vocals too loud son...instead of echoin the whole shit u shoulda echoed the endin words...i hate renegade it always skip...lol...i can hear it skippin...

i feel ur emotion tho...