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"You Can't Leave Me Like This" aka "The Comeback Part 2"
"You Can't Leave Me Like This" aka "The Comeback Part 1" Listen girl... This is the hardest thing I've ever had to do.. So check it... girl i need your lips i cant survive without the vibe of your kiss when we together it was bliss but spread apart i cant handle this we were meant to be from the start, i cant live with us apart this live isnt wokrin now cuz i need to feel the thump of your heart i need you in my life, my body just wont function without you in it i still remember the softness of your hips but without you i aint legit listen to me because you have to forget about the shit i said i was drunk, baby i could prove it about how many tears ive shed baby id do just about anything just to see that beautiful smile you know my style, we'll see each otha in a while even if it takes me miles i still remember your sexy brown eyes as you said your goodbyes suga you dont know how i cried when i found out it wasnt a lie i need you in my arms so i can feel your wartm and beauty im gunna do anything and everything i can to get u back, its my duty you always be in my heart and in yours baby i hope i exsist but baby please fall back into my arms .. you cant leave me like this |
not bad...
i honestly dont really be feeling these kind of songs in TEXT fourm but this was decent... flow was decent * kinda off in some places.... picture was decent... creativeness was aight... all around decent drop keep elevating... 7.0 outta 10 |
very emotional piece of poetry.. nice..
i need you in my arms so i can feel your wartm and beauty im gunna do anything and everything i can to get u back, its my duty you always be in my heart and in yours baby i hope i exsist but baby please fall back into my arms .. you cant leave me like this ^ending was nice.. seems like u poured sum feelings into this poem fa real.. and this what made me want to continue reading.. u stuck to the topic throughout the whole thing, structure good too.. no flaws that stood out in my opinion. good luck, pz... |
Thanks for the feedback.. uppin
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its kind on tight
i don't really feel this shit it aint for me but it is tight fo people who like it u fel me ------Keep it Gutta u-undastand----- |
Bumpin for my self.
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