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A Womens Love
...weerd had to do it...keystyle.... first glance i studder for words with a lisp could this be?..perpetuial bliss.. "sup ma" i mutter almost refering ina tranze lips soft an wet..ready for a kiss not a sexual attraction?..my head retractin cold sweat an abnormal reaction get the numerals jot the textual action its everlastin now im relaxin.. learned personal information her hesitation to retire that sex fetish.. could be burned as i explain my hearts application expire her cheeks redish.. eternal hearts an souls forever in love put aside the envy for careful functions external wounds from firstglance i was sold pain an love brings fightful junctions common phrases contridict our love "two birds in a feather"... the omen crazes blissful love forever divorced?..never always together.. |
this was pretty dope... you definately had the vocab locked down easily... good wordplay in every bar... structure was decent could have made the lines a little shorter seeing as you made the font smaller to compensate for that so i guess it works out... some decent imagery... dope piece 8.5/10
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lol.thanks flow.......
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yo ill giv it a go
yo mic on yo luk their tender love and care is alwayz wat a grown man needs, no matter how bad you are even plannin evil deeds when she 1st walked iinto the room i wuz nervous but thought her bein born on earth was the worlds 1st purpose 1 glance of her i wuz already weak and stunned i wuz like "whats her name" just there my whole world spun without reactin i asked her would u like 2 dance?? she said "yes" i felt quieezy when i held her soft hands my world wuz turnin wit out i me knowin wat to do...... i looked at her thinkin shes the 1 girl i Really luv you.... she turned around thinkin what 2 do say.......next thing i know wuz her name was Elane |
yo peeps holla bout mi verse
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dont post your shit in here wtf........
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wtf were do i post then.....................................(huh)
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make your own thread christ........
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