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kid Knockout 12-12-04 01:59 PM

Make Your Mark
 
like martin luther king,ive got a dream
where everybodys themslves and creme weed flows like a stream
fuck a glock, its time ta think outside the box for a start
with 6 billion differnet minds its time ta find a way to make your mark
if we all project our dope qualities for better in the world
and respect each other equally from every boy to girl
who knows how far we could go, how good it could be
we could all cop a rollz an a milli salary
every country in the world could splurge an be free
an povertys in the past, learnin bout it in history
we could all experience shit you thought youd never see
like when i look in the mirror an amaze myself lyrically
everyones got potential, from poorest to high credentials
work out your mental an be surprised how high your mind il send you
so if two heads together are said to be better than one
we should divide borders, combine countries, subtract guns
add peace to the streets, detox all the fiens
instead of spendin green on pills we could kill a disease
kid knockout

SR$ 12-12-04 02:24 PM

:thumbup: its straight.....i gives it a 7/10. 4real
good use of vocab kid...could have more structure though


PS...
if you can. can you go back to my shit and tell me what i need to work on plz. ~1~

Lawless (Hs) 12-12-04 04:38 PM

decent flow... work on ya structure a lil bit... and try to extend ya lines a lil' but besides that you were good..

Blunt Rapper 12-14-04 04:13 PM

its alright.......................but work on your structure


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