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niggas no dat i stay wit da dutch ill have my niggas post up on da block and shoot like mj in da clutch.
i dont blaze up but i got da weed stack nutted in ya gurl eye so it's lazy like tmacs nigga i aint no punk my hands is nice i leave lumps on ya face like speed bumps. i stay wit da beam and a tank a gasoline leave you somewhere shittin out ya last quisine |
hmm they were ok.....you used a couple of multis....but space out the lines so we can see were one line ends and the other one starts....for example
i stay wit da beam and a tanka gasoline leave you somewhere shittin out ya last quisine just dont that from now on so its easier to read.....but keep elevating.... |
thx fo da advice
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all around not bad but get more original and try to re-word ya stuff better aight.... 5.5 outta 10.... can u drop feed back on my open mic... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=166048 ^^ thats the link drop some feed back... |
thx ill be sure to drop my response good look tho!
vote da battle http://community.rapverse.com/showt...ht=livin-legend |
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