Random shit
 

im roamin da roads like a street urchin, stomach hurtin, wit notin 2 eat, always wonda, should i have gone da ova way, turn my back on da street? :thefinger should i have, taken da otha path at the fork in da road? da ansa 2 dat is i really dont kno. im undecided bare niggas on da streets are "wot" devided
i dnt wanna have a kid end up like me, it was my destiny 2 cause trouble but i shoulda dun it lightly, lifes like walkin down da road in da middle of da nite, dis shit aint a jurney, its a plight, get 2 da end i see da lite shine brite

Metaphors out the ass
 

I’m On A Political ‘Platform’ Meaning My Views Are ‘Raised’
I Don’t Usually Act Norm Because I’m Use To Rage
Life Is Like Vehicles, If You Have The ‘Will’ (Wheel) To Go On You Reach Higher Elevation
‘Steer’ Clear Of Appalling Topics Because Conversation Passes Through Interesting Locations
But Through The Cracks Showcasing Light I See The Brutal Fights
I Know That War Is About Who Is ‘Left’ And Not About Who Is ‘Right’
Lord Knows I’m Taking A ‘New Direction’ In Life But It Could The Wrong Turn
I Try To Strive For Perfection, If Not That Wrong Turn Could Make This Song Burn
Its Said That Ones Life Is ‘Ripened’ Green With Experiences
So I’m Highly Mature Besides My Black Means And Appearances

Seems like i cant edit my post...
But that was some lame shit you posted mayne...
2/5 at best...

well i kinda agree wit JC up there man....u need to work on ya structure as well as ur vocab and throw in some multis fa fun....HO-LA!!!!it could have been good but u needed to drop more as well as put more emotion in it....i couldn't really feel nothin there so yeah...2/5...4/10 whateva u prefer....HO-LA!!
just sendin some advice to help u get betta....Peaceezy

like a 1.5/10

dude start writin' more that was really really bad. I don't even think I can tell you what to work on other than EVERYTHING.