J.R. Freeze vs hang-man
 

Battle Rules:
30 min checkin
6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
due 15 min

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-16-04 at 06:06 PM

Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in.

J.R. Freeze has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-16-04 05:59 PM.

hang-man has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-16-04 06:00 PM.

FREEZ DEF got room for improvement, ill settle on the bid
for christ sakes, shits enough to highlight an episode of cribs 1
played and stretched lines, ill smack this text geek
shits like a soap opera episode,- we'll catch the end of em next week 2
gettin smacked up, this isnt healthy is it?
so get HEAVY HITTA'S and we'll keep it strictly business 3
bite the dust, ya text is poor, truely
only hot PART in ya verse?, the part mentioning yours truely 4
Winning your hoping, beating me your dreaming
even then after your verse u awoke screaming 5
Slow ass fucker, aint hood... but claims he is
After all he's seen the block a few times... on my aim list 6 bitch hold that!

COMPLEX
I’ll Murder This ‘Cat’ With Liquefying Lacerations From Hazardous *Text*
Cut Off All ‘9 Lives’ And Chop His Body In Parts Then Ship Them With Fed *Ex*
Cause That’s The Only Way Ya Goin To Touch People Across The *Globe*
Leave Ya Body Oozing Red All Over Ya *Clothes* Makin Ya Look Like Ya Got The Boston Red Sox’s *Wardrobe*
Throw Down Metaphorical Grenades That Flash Like A *Strobe* And *Blow~Ya~Earlobes*

stop lil sumthing.........
my ~gun blowz~till ~lung blowz~ like jerseys in closets i ~hung pro'z~// think about it
da ~drum rollz~i "cause flames" like spills of rum on a ~hot stove~//
Slicing Hang-mans neck now
dis ~dumb hoe~ like a cold pussy dis little ~cunt frozed~//
i ~hunt those~to ~tuck souls~and buck more holes in you then ~ bum clothes~//
like your sister on her period, Hang is a ~annoying bitch~//
get ~boiled with hits~you forgot your laxatives cuz you was never in ~control of shit ~// ( holly shit )
JR is playin target practice
Dis ~basterd lies~get ~slashed to die~your life must be like girls gone wild cuz its ~ flashin by~// ( oh my god..lmao )
if rap was a film, you wouldnt "make da cutlike ~ plastic knives~//

MURder.....
I'LL reattach this hangmans head,then send him to mental-WARDs/
U couldN't be tha same as my skill if u turned your record Bac-WARds/
(OH SHIT U GEt ME 3-9 ,9-3 hahah sorry)

^^ All That Was, Pre-written U Bitch Ass Fag Thats A Weak Win If U Do Beat Me U'r Trash-man 4real

son pre written my ass jus because ur ass an slow dont mean i suc an i can do a free in fuckin 5 mins bitch an i'll prove it when i do audio so dont hate hoooooo.....

This was feedback posted for J.R. Freeze
 

Damn Homie...structure i don't like but i used to use it so i ain't too mad...metaphors were decent...multies were on point though a few were stretched, your lines wurr a bit stretched..0-10 scale i give you a 8.5...

Best lines/Fav lines-
dis ~dumb hoe~ like a cold pussy dis little ~cunt frozed~//
i ~hunt those~to ~tuck souls~and buck more holes in you then ~ bum clothes~//
like your sister on her period, Hang is a ~annoying bitch~//
get ~boiled with hits~you forgot your laxatives cuz you was never in ~control of shit

Lines you Could Have Kept-
Ya whole opener except last two lines...

^^^ the reason hes whole verse was good besies the last 2 lines its cuz he bit that shit and he thought it would be good to toss a personal in there that was weak as fuck cuz hes really weak as fuck and the person he bit from is aight

u's a LAMEEEEEEE

sorry i fucked up and didn't do it right....but for da record..J.R got my vote...hang-man i left alot of feedback but fucked up and it didn't post...

elevate homie.. and don't rhyme a word wit itself...but decent verse...

-Jus Truth-
D.Truth

0-0 still upp'in cuz it aint my fult u fucked up word

hahah damn man u jus can't handle a loss right????its okay ur jus jelous.....ur a lame an a herb who tha fuck ryhmes bid an cribs ur sooooo fuckin basssiccccc an weak......

This was feedback posted for J.R. Freeze
 

Nice...I cant vote yet because of my posts...but J.R Freeze would have got this if I could...

Voted For: J.R. Freeze

damn dog dat was fasho,both verses came
hard but im rollin wit freeze he had more punches,
structure goes to hangman, but overall it was tight

Voted For: J.R. Freeze

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